Ment tough*** not though

God damnnnnnn one dude snapped here fairs in fellas this shit was nice

yo i r8 dat fragll rock line

eminesum123vreel dat was sum beginer shit, look in2 sum batles 4 examples of multis, n da site structure, den u can look in2 goin on 2 punchis n wordplay, dis materia jus didnt cut it g

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sum of ur wordplay is decent, but as i sed b4, 2 sylable schemes u cn do beter den dat, tha bustin down da throat line wuz decent, playd scheme but da bj think made it a bit less tired seemin, mom again n arm again another xample of dubble rimin liek ur other batle, as wel as da last 2 lines jus showin u cn rime spayed wit played. rare dat sum1 has da wordplay n punches vaguely understood b4 da rimin comes in strong but its not a bad place 2 go rimin n structure is da easy part, as sed b4 maybe sum fresher angles but jus my opinion

nine7eight, first thing I noticed within your bars, is your very simple multi sets. (Capped Rhymes). You were mostly sitting at 2-3 syllables, you want to be at around 5-7 for an eight line battle, a good example of this would be your "FRAG'LL ROCK YOU ROOKIES / BATTLES OPS, THEY PUSSY" multi set, which was sitting at 6 syllables. Anyone can rhyme 2-3 syllables, its real easy. The main component you want to focus on after getting nice clean multi sets, is creativity. An example would be, vet / dog / get sprayed. You should of taken that concept, and made an entire bar out of it. Alot of your work is straight up disses, it lacks the creative spark that gives that WOW factor to a bar. Also, when being creative, think outside of the box na mean? Cops / Pig bars have been done to death, keep in mind this site has been around since 2006, so alot of bars have already been said, or alot of concepts have been seen frequently. Also, say for example you are battling eminemsumo113vreal, I would of tried to come up with a eminem name flip or something a bit more personal, that way you know it hasn't been done, because its regarding his name. (Although Eminem bars have probably been done, you know what I mean). Diss him for the fact hes from Russia, things like that.

Eminem, your verse sounded very clean when read aloud, but it also lacked some real creative spark. It would been good for like an audio cypher or something, when writing out your rhymes in text format like this, try to keep an eye on all the details, you were also sitting at very low syllable count multis, which once again, is kinda' easy to do. A good idea you had was, expose you like Mark Zuckerberg, you coulda turned that into a whole bar. Take that concept, and build off of it. Try to get atleast four nice hits in. All multi sets should be the same syllable count too, otherwise you get what we call a "Broken Multi". Voters will dock points for things like that. Here's an example of a good multi set, and a bad one below:

POPPIN THE FOURTY FIVE (5 Syls)

DROPPIN A CORNY LINE (5 Syls)

These sets match up, and give for a clean read.

POPPIN THE FOURTY FIVE (5 Syls)

DROPPIN A DAMN CORNY LINE (6 Syls)

This is a bad multi set, as you can see how it sounds off now.

Just some pointers for you both, I hope this helped. Due to mistakes made, creativity and over-all structure to the verse. I am leaning this way, slightly. Fairs in yall.

5-4, low to low.

Light Work Fairs in