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Not gr8 either way but at leest himura aimed at his oponent. mid 3 low 3

lol this shit was hard to vote on cos ones wordin was awful but he was more direct, tha other was clean but felt cypherish at times ... givin it to tha more dorect verse here ... both should work on rhyming making sure that tha rhymes ain't basic or forced, also try executing concepts with more creativity to bring fresher punches with more sting ... fair's in 

Himura asked for an expo:

Multis ---- basic ones are like SMACKED UP and complex ones could be like SMACKED UP TILL YA FACE IS LOPSIDED ... make sure that EACH syllable rhymes e.g: imPROVIN YA LINES cos they LOSING THA SHINE [im-PROVE-IN-YA-LINES / LOSE-IN-THA-SHINE] 

Setups ---- tha bit in tha "_____" and tha rest is 'filler', keep filler to a min to keep your bar on tha concept

Punch ---- tha punch is tha capped bit e.g: "rockin a design" unless you a WALLPAPER DESIGN!! [WALLPAPER DESIGN is tha punch, setup by "rockin a design" 

Concept ---- what tha bar is about e.g. sex life, and you should execute this creatively to bring more sting

that should help get you on tha right path

Ok...felt the winner here was clear so no need for a huge expo. Crim hittin' the ground running man.

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Po non expo vote deleted

Felt one was gonna have this then the tables turned big time about 2 bars in. Take the time to put into you're bars for a better drop

Good battle. Battle of the multis and flow and one had better internal rhyming.

I felt one started well but lost the sting after 2nd bar format, instead of geting in a cypher mode he cud have attacked more, the other left a set up there with no ending punch? And came with played out lines either way he had the better verse..

Crimson- Half of your verse wasn't aired at your opponent imo. There weren't many lines where you directly took shots at him. Avoid using the same words more than once like rhymes/ mind. Flow was ok, liked your complexity too. Work on your punches and try to come up with more than two syllable rhymes. Himura- I gave you the W because most of your lines were aimed at your opponent. Work on making your punches hit hard & Cap your multies too. Fairs in

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Thanks everyone for the help