turnbull not turnball

This was a difficult read both had some serious wording issues which really took away from your verses .... made it very difficult to follow .... furthermore the execution of the concepts was very different from each other hefty I see what you where trying to do concept was nice but execution was poor and that’s to do with your wording some of those Multies where a bit all over the place as wel ... volcanie this just read like it was rushed which I’m assuming it was as this was a open ... however in terms of what’s on the page I feel one edged this with slightly better concepts and puns both need major work or need to take there time a little more a re-read what they are posting... .:X:.

ya i was trying to rush it actually because i usually do longer set ups. but i guess it wasnt a good idea. good lookin out X Calibur

my winner had more excogitate and less gasconading invited some idiosyncratic and magnanimous belonging to one's peculiar loser who had an individual character but not enough luminescent which the winner clear had as he jizzed all over this battle FAIRZ IZ JIZZINN !