Close but I have my winner edging this with better multis then his opponent. Fairs in fellas keep grinding it out yo

wtf

“No reason to get loose with drugs like your mum”, how did that line not kill him?? Please explain

lmao because that was a corny ass line 

Gcertified: multis were okay except towards tha end where they became basic and one didn't match up in terms of syllables, punches weren't really landing but they did have some sting (better punches = better execution which means being more creative in setups and also sticking to tha concept in a clever way)

BoiSwainy: punches also weren't landing (same advice here for ya that i gave Gcertified) ... multis were basic, try bringin more syllables into your rhyme schemes (e.g. 1 syllable = HIT // TWIT // BIT whereas 4 syllables = BRING PLAYED RHYME SCHEMES // WINS TAKE BRIGHT PEEPS {lol that might be a bit fucked up but it's just to show ya})

got my winner here with a better structured verse overall ... fair's in

sexy battle G-spot won this one in my opnion

Ehh, lots of improvements need to be made by both. Please see a list of things I have compiled, that I believe alot of inexperienced dudes should follow:

1. Multis, are the capped rhymes they must match syllable wise, and rhyme perfectly. Ensure you are not stretching them for the sake of getting your syllable counts up, they cannot be forced. 

2. Structure, try to have 4 punches for an 8 liner, spending 2 lines per bar.

3. Set-ups, quote the witty parts in your bars that have double meanings, and the set-up should be relevant to your final punch.

4. Punches, ensure your punchlines are targetting your opponent, try to flip his name or where he's from, personal attacks usually have a little more sting to them.

I think BoiSwainy, is making more errors than GCertified though. Alot of your bars are a reach, don't make too much sense and the rhyming is fairly weak, but the same goes for GCertified, the rhyming was very weak throughout, especially towards the end of the verse. Sitting at like 1-3 syllables for rhymes, and repeating words that rhyme doesn't help the case and comes off as a bit amateur-ish. I think one had better ideas here though, and made slightly less errors, I am leaning this way. If yall need a little more help, just shoot me a message.

Fairs in, fellas!

4-3, low to mid.