noise is nice

shit battle.... i farted better things than this... :/

send me 32 mr nutty 

Zeus, this one was much better than the 32 that I just read from you, but still pretty bad. Remove the < & > it really just makes your writing look like its jumbled up and makes it hard to read. Although this verse was a bit more directed at your opponent and you actually filled the box, so I can see you are moving in the right direction. Going back to what i was saying in the other battle, try to have your punches look like this:

"Set-Up" --> "PUNCH!!!"

This makes it easier for the reader to digest the information you are presenting.

@Himura, I think you took this with better attempts made to attack your opponent and set up your punchlines, I see you are trying your hard at WP but you didn't execute them properly here.

Pressure-Rise/Pressurize is an example of a WP that works. They sound the exact same, where as rip a port/report sound completely different. You want to ensure that when you use WP it works gramtically both ways as well. Also in your first bar, you repeat words in your multi sets, try to avoid this - it really takes the sting outta bars, and makes it look like you weren't creative enough to come up with something else. You are from what i can see, making decent strides to take creative angles on things, and just based off pure readability and a more direct verse (regardless of the failed WP's) I am going to give you the W here. I see potential in you, so if you wanna go through bar by bar breaks downs, just send me an IM and i'll be happy to help !

Himura had a cleaner read and attempted some better punches (to increase their strength make sure your multi sets are tha same syllable size and that each syllable rhymes, make sure that your concepts are executed in a creative and direct way so you really attack your opponent, also use tha concepts and flip them in your setups [similies, metaphors, irony, e.t.c]) ... also one thing i noticed is tha wp was quite iffy (make sure it works both ways e.g. da feet // defeat [but NEVER use this one lol, it's played af] your wordplay had different sounds so it don't work well imo) but it's a good attempt at writing a verse 

Zeus you had a really choppy read (make sure to maintain tha flow [i do this by trying to keep each line in tha bar tha same size at least or close]) ... and punches didn't really make sense or have an impact (make sure your wordin is good so tha reader gets everythin w/o minimum Expoing or shit) ... tha execution here wasn't good too (make sure you stick to your concept within ya bars and flip them creatively for tha better punch) ... keep elevatin playa!

i got my winner with a readable and better structured verse, attempted to bring stronger punches ... fair's in