One felt forced in the way it was worded in places and the other felt much more fluid but not quite as advanced.

MaCc edges this here as it was close. My reasoning for this is as follows:

Nessie surprised me here, pretty clean wording but could use a bit more pep to the verse, the first bar took way too long to get to the punch and took out the sting. Keep em short and sweet. If you are using multis inbetween make sure they are important ones otherwise looks like you wasting the box. I am giving this to MaCc due to more punch strength due to quicker and more clever set-ups. Although the pull out & bust / ejaculation bar is pretty played. Good-battle.

This was pretty close. Both had some good punches but also poor punches, with mediocre to decent execution. I thought one was slightly ahead overall.

BTW, Nessie, do "MASTERED" and "ARSON" rhyme for you? Normally I would rage at someone for that, but maybe it rhymes to you since you're Scottish.

Fair's in.

Good battle!