I honestly can't decide a winner at this time...imma have to read em both a couple more times...I liked Rai's approach & clear setups, and Esso's intellect & humor...idk.

gb from both but i think Rai was little bit better here

Dope!!

dimes for everyone today..rai, felt some of your flips were a bit forced  in terms of analogy. ex. doctorss pad. ,rich physician... some good stuff, like honda ignition wasnt bad.. just wording was forced.. esso.enjoyed the relavemce of your setups. your best bar set imo that won this was the southern ,  boy, traditions punch.. hay maker imo.. amyway good battle for a tough scheme

got one winning by a slim margin. his concept to punch connections were stronger.. the whole 'scripts started off rocky' & the incest shit was nice, i like how you worded everything. rai i feel like you did well here however it took wayyy to long to get to the final punch.. i see what you were doing, trying to weave jabs in between punches but it soon became mundane.. lost a lot of punch power due to it.. winning verse flowed better, punches were A-B.. nice shit both tho

Dope battle. Think Imma give it to the one who I was feeling more. By this I mean he was connecting a lot more than his opponent imo. The loosely related shit was fire. Rai your's was also decent but I was struggling to read it at points. Could just be me but Esso got this. Fairs in. 

damn this was lit af... my winner's verse was imo consistent from start to finish, had dope concepts throughout, multis were on point too, tha punches were hard hitting and the verse overall was just one of tha best i seen, this guy's a killer lmaoo... loser began well with that "moses" concept (dooope) but i think it fell off from there, them middle multis cost him imo, cos they ruined tha punch, but tha last few bars were better but tha closer wasn't as hard as the opponents... dope shit from both... keep at it, my fair's in as always... .OPS.

See im cool with set-ups to the punch. The style that some of y'all adapted on Lbs beef. To me it makes the the finishing line predictable. 

Ok rai: ypu had more setups tp the punch so it made the read longer.. Didnt fuck up the flow tho. That was top notch . it was a good read to me ... 

Esso: you had the best line of the battle . the southerners plot was majpr to me ..  Your arrangement of words that flowed was impressive. I dont kno how you amd him talked about ignitions , i guess great minds think alike lol. 

Fv in fellaz nice read. It came down to wittiness to me .

???need credits. but esso's sounded a little better.Rai's start and Esso's endding would be so much better if put into one rap.

Damn, okay I'm going to be giving out my rare 8+ ratings on this battle.

First off, neither of you rode the scheme poorly. Rai, you had one awkward multi set to me (BODY SWOLE UP WITH PRESCRIPTIONS) but nothing major. Esso, you had no significant problems with your scheming at all, so congratulations on that.

Now, to go into more detail about each battler's verse...

Rai: You were swinging out of the gate. You went for a long-bar, haymaker-style punch-fest here, using one or more relevant setups for your main punch. However, it wasn't as effective as it could have been because many of the setups were so closely tied into the finishing punch that they came off as insubstantial extensions of it rather than meaningful additions. For an idea of what I mean by that, see Esso's loosely-related punch; the setups are relevant to the final concept but also different enough to foster additional interest.

Your concept were fairly creative but written so similarly that they got repetitive. You have one punch style: Combine a few terms and make a double meaning out of the phrase. This isn't necessarily bad, but having such a lack of versatility in your punching style reflects poorly on your maturity as a battler. This leads me to a serious problem with your bars: They almost all read alike. You do what you do fairly well but you seriously need to branch out.

This isn't just me ranting and raving, it's serious criticism. And I don't think your verse was bad at all, I'm still giving it an 8 because it was dope. I'm just pointing out the flaws because that's how you have to help people develop as battlers.

Verse highlights: The jump start the turnover rate bar was dope and easily the most creative concept of your verse.

Esso: This was a disgustingly good punch fest. I suppose I could find something to bitch about if I really tried, like lack of wordplay, but I can't bring myself to diss a verse like this.

Your bars all had setups that were relevant but different enough from the final concept to add interest. Your wording was fluent throughout. All your concepts were fairly easy to understand but they weren't basic at all... they were mostly fresh twists on common phrases.

Still, some of your lines were lacking. Your closer in particular was the weakest spot in your verse. It's structured like a dope haymaker: it has multiple punches that also tie into the final concept. And yet, I just wasn't feeling it that much, mainly because all of those concepts were played. The execution was dope but not enough to make this bar great.

Verse highlights: The loosely related bar was extremely dope, with the way you combined the separate ideas of incest and irrelevant setups and fluently weaved them into a powerful punch. I do take personal offense to this though, because I love watching little sister hentai.

Final thoughts: As an addendum to all of the above: these verses were 16s on a long scheme, so it's understandable that these verses would contain more flaws than usual... and yet, they really didn't. Each battler had about the level of execution I see in their regular battles, so props to that.

Overall, one was just stronger in all aspects, especially creativity and fluency. I have a clear winner. Fair's in.

This battle will be by preference. Both had the same level of wordplay lots of creative multis and dope setups leading to heavy punches. Fire fire battle, hard to call.

This battle is fucking insane! An also about as close as it can come so it goes down to preference. the votes in though guys great read

............. Voted: Esso /
Posted on: 2017-09-10 15:49:41