Pain is dope but XYZ had the beytet flow and bars no hate fair vote both keep doing yall thong

Ez vote here. One had the style that made the verse fire. Other was ok . fv in . guud punches thrown

one verse began well but dropped down towards tha middle, keepin tha punches consistent wouldv'e maybe got him tha vote, dopest lines were Left On the "Key-Board" To See “HIS CAP GET SHIFTED!!" and Still Be Scared "TO PACK THE BISCUITS!!”... winner was consistent all through his verse with punches and had nice concepts throughout which got this vote, dopest line for me was 'steam go away' once i let da 'IRON OFF', but the winner maybe should lessen tha filler in some bars... fair's in... APOC... 

My bad for the mis spelling PAINN was heat but XYZ a smoother flow.

Gb

day in day out people put their heart into every bar. Some do it easy and finesse, yall two finesse them shits. im voting for the box which had the bars that gave me that "talk to em" vibe. one particular line got a "Don demarco".... "shit like that" reaction from me. votes in.  

Alright, so I guess I'd better go ahead and drop some knowledge here. I'll do a bar-by-bar breakdown for this one.

PaiNN bar 1: This was decent. The most obvious problem was that the setup to the lumberjack punch took too long to get to. You generally never want to spend one line of text or more without a multi set because it damages the flow and comes off stretched. The punch was alright. The keyboard punch was actually pretty good but the keyboard / caps / shifted theme has been done before, I can cite several instances if you're curious.

PaiNN bar 2: I think you should have put the quotes around the entire "Robbed A Grocery Store" phrase because that feels more natural, and the multi set felt a bit awkward to me but that's probably just an accent difference. Also, since the punch didn't require a specific mention of a grocery store to work, the "grocery store" part could have been switched with something more closely connected to the "biscuit" idea, like Hardee's or Carl's Jr or grandma's oven or wherever they serve biscuits in Ontario. This was a solid punch overall but it does have flaws worth keeping in mind.

PaiNN bar 3: I'm going to be completely honest, this looks like a solid punch but the reference went right over my head. Structurally however I do see a flaw: you ended the second multi set with the word "then." Usually, the word "then" only appears in the beginning or middle of a sentence, so ending a statement with it comes off awkward a lot of the time.

PaiNN bar 4: This was pretty good but had two obvious flaws. 1. You twice repeated yourself, first with by repeating Up in your opening internal scheme and then by repeating Jones in your main scheme. 2. Casey Jones from the ninja turtles seems like a pretty obscure reference honestly, maybe it will be more obvious to people from your generation. Again, the concept was good, just a bit oblique and questionably executed.

Overall, my biggest suggestions are to be less wordy and use more general references. Use as few words as reasonably possible. I prefer phrase-plays and idioms based on common expressions so that nearly everyone will understand them. In the past I used to make obscure references but learned better the hard way.

exwhyzee bar 1: Okay, this was well-executed but I have a couple flaws to point out. First, why mention an "unattended" bag? That seems like a self-diss, saying that nobody is interested in viewing this battle. There must be a way to make that concept more impactful. And honestly, the white colleges bar went right over my head so that's 1-1 for having bars I didn't get lmao.

exwhyzee bar 2: The steam go away / iron off was dope because both of the meanings work in both the setup and the punch. The idea was fairly simple but the way you made it work out was dope. You tried to go for a creative wordplay with the tylenol bar but it seems like a bit of a reach to me... I get it but "onto the tylenol" and "onto the tile n' all" both sound unnatural, honestly.

exhwyzee bar 3: You put "bust fast" in quotes but I don't see how that connects to the dentist punch; am I missing something? The bad mouthin / looking into da light shit was a great fresh flip on a common phrase though so good job with that.

exwhyzee bar 4: DICK 'ER DOWN feels unnatural to me in this multi set, but again, maybe that's just an accent thing. I do like how this connects to the previous bar with the suggestion of having a painful / diseased mouth. The internal multi was helpful too. Ultimately though I think this was your weakest bar here; I just wasn't feeling the concept.

Final thoughts: This was a good battle. Whether it's deserving of this long ass expo, I don't know, but if I'm going to vote I might as well drop knowledge, haha. Both sides had good bars, with some obvious flaws, but one had more than the other and that's the main factor that swings my vote one way. Fair's in.

Dam this was Very Close had to Revist a few times Amazing Battle..

PaiNN~you're verse was Consistent through out I liked you're Opener Crack addictions line shifted line was Good the pack the bisque ta line was funny the Roped up instead then didn't really Understand..and the closer Jones like Casey was Decent..

Exwhyzee~you're Opener Crime stopper Shit was Clever and funny I liked the mind boggling line also white collages line was Decent the tile n all Tylenol word play Was Sick and you're Closer Went to Smile was Good..

Overall~Could see this going Either way depending Upon Preference I'm voting for the Emcee I felt Punches Connected a bit harder also Was a bit Smoother also this Mc got this in most areas including Entertainment fv no hate~

Pain had a flow and good grammer "U" is not good grammer "you" is good grammer.