My winner just had better word play and punches.. loser wasn't bad, just work on it

gb fv, Ifo nice try but thats a little too basic and Trouble good job but I see a little bit of forced multies, I like how you started the text tho. gb

Thanks for the nice words guys.P.S. This was my first time ever of doing a battle or writing any Hip-Hop verse.

winner had a better structure and some pretty good jabs. croft, keep writing and ask some of the vets on here for some advice on what to work on..good luck to both, no hate vote..peace

My winner got this with punches and rhymes however some broken multies where there to be seen ... in the first bar especially .... however with that said good execution of punches and bars like the phone over the head line that was pretty dope ....

to my loser this verse shows shows lots of potential with your vision of your concepts you brought it brought back memories of how I used to write my shit back in the early 00's with some coaching you could become very good ... piece of advice try battling people with few battles and if a guy called Bnas mails you for a battle don't bother with him .... good luck and if you need any advice hit me up ...

Winner had pretty good multi usage. Would say he needs to work on cleaning up the structure and wording. Loses needs to work on complexity and depth. Fairs in.