Winner came equipped with a more text-style verse, better multis (although the first couple of bars were pretty suspect)-loser's style seems more suited for audio battles, make sure to put your concepts in quotes and capitalize your multis (which you should use more consistently)-pretty good wordplay for a rookie though, look at more battles and you'll get it in no time 

winner kept multies flowing...loser started off well tho...

Bnas put him in a body bag on this one. loved the fat chicks breast line. FALL BACK son! good battle. progressive line was slick too. Keep killin

ORANGE HAD SOME NICE PUNCHLINES, LIKED THA STEPHEN HAWKIN PART AND ITS GOOD TO SEE YOU USING WORDPLAY, I WOULDA RATED YOUR VERSE HIGHER IF IT WASNT FOR COUPLE OF BROKEN MULTIS...... BNAS HAD SOME NICE CONCEPTS AND DECENT PUNCHES, FELT THA FILLER WAS TOO LONG IN A FEW PARTS BUT STILL YOU DEFO DID ENOUGH TO GET MY VOTE........ FAIRS DROPPED, HOLLABACK. 

Voted.

One had to hard to follow verse because some of the references you were reaching with. Outside of quotes IG you have to do a whole lot of extra explanation, I think it takes away, if you're beginning to use explanations in your verse, you beginning to reach. Because of this, there were wording issues that needed to be dealt with, which I feel overshadowed the good concepts and ideas that you had as well in your verse. Not bad of start for one.

For the other I felt like in this one your setups and buildups were unnecessarily long and may have made the decision in the battle. ThE first scheme should have ended at fat chicks breast and hurt your case because it went on for too long. The ideas were not as well executed as a result of that however, their rhyming structure is solid. Their improvements should be focused on filtering what are the best lines to include in a rhyme scheme to create the most fluid verse possible. Can't believe the fair, but is in.