Elemental, nice use of multies but your ideas/concepts could be more creative. Not bad, just an observation. Princess, you're new so you'll get this a lot, but you have to be more creative or put more thought into your bars. First thing, don't CAP words that don't rhyme. Capping a bunch of irrelevant words throws the reader off because they're universally used to set rhymes apart from the rest of the bar. If a bunch of random words are capitalized then it throws the reader off by a lot. Second, 1-word rhymes are out of style. See how Elemental rhymed more than 1 word each time? That's called a multie, and the more creative your multies are the more like a pro it makes you look. Simple 1-worders make you look like a novice. Keep battling though. You'll get the hang of it. Voted: SuperFlex / PR1NC355
Posted on: 2016-07-12 04:15:16

Winner Was Decent but Not Amazing. Work on Your Syllable Count. Prin' You're Getting Better which is a Very Quick Adjustment!! My Advice work On Deeper Concepts. Say things that Aren't So Common AND on Capitalize Words That Are In Your Punch. Anything in Caps Should Rhyme w/ Things In that Line. But Great Job Y'all!! VOTE BACK!! Voted: SuperFlex / PR1NC355
Posted on: 2016-07-12 10:41:14

Kool battle now this 2 has similar text style..I felt one excetued the multie game well thou n the other was basic but can stil improve the fair is in. Voted: SuperFlex / PR1NC355
Posted on: 2016-07-13 15:27:56