Expo: the letters we write with Are White? (2) "Bionic Pancreas" have dual- chamber pumps that operates electronicly (3) "Walter Scott" is an International Black Activist (4) "Bhang" is the other term synonymously with ganja or hashish.. Comment Only
Posted on: 2016-04-13 15:04:33

Ok this battle almost was good but both made mistakes that really took away from their verse.. Let's start here cuz it bothered me the most.. Worm and warm is a horrible word play. Doesn't even sound close. But plants and plans is equally as bad. Come on the words have to sound the same every syllable and you can't leave the 't' sound out or it's just saying plans twice. Cunning, your opener and first few bars weren't so bad but you really trailed off their fam. Your verse overall is hard to read and it doesn't seem like all of it makes sense nor does it look like multis all match. Start simpler and become more complex as you go. A simple punch that makes sense is better then a complex one that leaves the reader lost af. King, all is said to Cun is just as true for you so you need to put your thoughts down more coherently so it's easier to understand but more so make sure your multis match. This was a draw for me. But I'll toss a coin and vote.. Coin tossed got my winner. Naw, one was slightly more comsitent to the end so here you go. Voted: Cunninglinguist / Orochi
Posted on: 2016-04-13 18:01:25

Fair Vote. Voted: Cunninglinguist / Orochi
Posted on: 2016-04-14 21:14:43

This one was a little hard for me to pick because I got lost in reading the pieces.. Overall I preferred one read to another both should attempt to keep the fluidity of the writing to keep the reader locked in fv one. Voted: Cunninglinguist / Orochi
Posted on: 2016-04-15 12:40:02