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Posted on: 2015-03-26 19:58:54

ILL, not a bad drop, but this is text fam. I can tell that if you read your post out loud, it would be a dope audio battle. It really would. You've been battling long enough to know how to structure your verse for the text arena to give it its maximum potential. But nonetheless, a good drop. I would have liked to see more creativity in the punchlines, but a good solid drop. DMan, you're new here so here's some pointers chief. You have potential, but step 1 is structuring your verse. Cap your rhymes so the reader knows how differentiate the rhyme from the rest of the bar. EX: "so im the chosen one u are the roach" could have been "So I'm the chosen one, you ARE THE ROACH" . For 2, add some personals. You're the responder in this scenario so you could have played on his name in some form or another. EX: "So I'm the chosen one, you ARE THE ROACH, and what's he ILL-4? when what I "Spray Eradicates" him w/out a SPARK OF HOPE. For 3, keep battling lol the more you battle people the better you'll get. You have potential fam. You're just new that's all. Respect for stepping up to a vet though. Fair is explained, and hopefully respected. S.O.N.S. Voted: Bnas / PSYCHOFREAK
Posted on: 2015-03-27 06:17:18

thanks for the feedback yo Comment Only
Posted on: 2015-03-27 15:55:47

dman killed with tht dick suckline Voted: Bnas / PSYCHOFREAK
Posted on: 2015-03-29 19:28:37

Agreed with Nawk. VB Voted: Bnas / PSYCHOFREAK
Posted on: 2015-03-30 03:07:47