stevevenom, it seems like you have the basic idea of battling down, but your punches are quite weak, u obviously know that you need to set your punches up with something relevant which you did on occasions but the end result wasnt anything too amazing. some parts didnt really make sense "you get MURDERED IN TIME, still a VIRGIN WIT CRIMES/then you HEARD OF MY LINES and try to FURTHER YA SHINE" are you saying he wants to 'further his shine' because he's heard of your lines? make sure ur lines make sense. pulldapin, you have a nice flow, a nice swag about it, but the actual content itself is quite weak. similar downfalls to steve in that your lines dont always make sense 'best shot like a bird in his prime' ... do birds in prime take the best shots? shots at what? keep it relevant. overall both have potential but i think 1 was slightly better with content Voted: COFFIN DODGER / PulldaPin
Posted on: 2014-12-20 19:33:48

lmao yo pass me some of that good shit !! Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-12-20 20:10:39

Agreed with Anar here. Both need to make sure that their concepts are actually complete and that everything is worded smoothly. Both need to work on making sure they don't have filler as well. Overall I thought one took this because they were more consistent. Make sure you guys are swinging for the fences every time and not going for a single. Fairs dropped Voted: COFFIN DODGER / PulldaPin
Posted on: 2014-12-21 11:25:28