The only TIME* you mentor well. Sorry about that. My brain crosses wires every now and then, haha. Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-10-06 23:05:28

Expo: Airborne is a cold/flu medication product, Virgin is a company which does commercial spaceflights, Oceania is the country in the book "1984" by George Orwell, metastasis is when cancer from one part of the body spreads to another part, metadata is something non-nerds won't understand that the NSA gathers, and string theory is a physical theory where matter is composed of one-dimensional objects called "strings" and "branes" (brains). Good luck, Jay. Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-10-07 00:34:39

But just to explain the punch... it is common for metadata to include names and such. Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-10-07 00:35:20

Damn it... holds mental patients, haha. Did I seriously repeat a word? I thought I was above this. Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-10-07 00:39:07

got damn yo I cant front this was a crazy battle, both dudes came at eachothers throats, one had to win and edged this with slightly better multis and wordplay, good shit from both yo high 7 to mid 7 Voted: Shodan / JayImmortal
Posted on: 2014-10-07 00:44:42

octavia- fundamentally, ya bars didnt have much noticeable flaws , other than that pisspoor nameflip...jay walking? naw fam.. that shits disappointing.. and i seen better from you.. some wording issues here, 'hes flew'? grammatically it reads improper... i'll fire shots and he is flew? this type of stuff needs to be adressed before you can elevate any further, weaker from the outlet likeVOLTAGE IS CHANGING..naw, too predictable.. work on the wording and stay consistent wit punches like your closer. this is a notch down to a few of the other battles i seen you do, try not to get lackadasical.... it'll hurt you in the long run.. jayimmortal - i see alot of elevation, and improvements in your scheme work..you also are tryin to implement concepts which is always a good thing when done right... in conclusion, felt that one was a tad more efficient in concept strength , althought not by much... fairs in Voted: Shodan / JayImmortal
Posted on: 2014-10-07 05:03:07

This was a decent battle. Felt my winner was not on his game with his multis like he usually is. Had some slightly better concepts that landed some decent hits. My loser wasn't far behind but lack of concept strength and wording issues held him back. Did have some nice bars tho, just wasn't as consistent as my winner. Fairs in. Keep Elevatin' Voted: Shodan / JayImmortal
Posted on: 2014-10-08 00:21:33

Alright. This was a cool 16 line battle. Must say though Octavia you were not on your a game IMO. You kind of babbled on. No haymakers were thrown from you. Execution was basic and some simple concepts were decent to my Taste's but were bland in impact. Jay. Yes I see a lot of elevation coming from you bro. You came correct. Had some great wording but need yo mix at kind some jabs as they were all too short in sting or just right at times. Just stay consistent with impact and delivery and you'll be fine bra. Just a more in depth and a tad more creative verse vs a decent script. Both are nice. Just up your game's a Lil bit though dawgs. We need a round 2 though. Always fair. If never there don. Send them back homies. Voted: Shodan / JayImmortal
Posted on: 2014-10-09 11:03:38

Imma go bar for bar on this one drop some knowledge... Octavia .... Bar 1 .... Jay walking puns played bruh I was using that concept in 06 and I ain't claiming I was the first bruh but nahhhh played also the build up and the multies stretched this bar too much .... Bar 2 .... Liked this one a bit more howeVe the BE NEAR ME. Multie is filler and wasnt needed should of cut that and led straight into the punch .... Bar 3 .... I liked how you stayed on point with the flew and airline conotations however major flaw you started with a 4 sylabel and carried on rhyming with 5's not a bad bar tho .... Bar 4 .... Now this is abit of a mixed fuck up YA carried on the multi but then threw it all out the window mid bar then switched YA approach and concept threw me then arguably your multies dont rhyme WORSENED SINCE DAY ONE ... VOLTAGE IS CHANGING , STORES METADATA they ain't rhyming famo .... Last bar .... This was ight short little jab could of been made better and replaced some lack lustre bars above it ..... JAY IMMORTAL ..... Bar 1 ..... Am I special or am I missing something here ???? Where the punch ??? Multies are coo it was building nicely then im sat here thinking where da punch !!!! ....bar 2 .... Felt the kids hands in a coffin had lots of potential should of made this the haymaker but YA used it as filler in the bar which was a shame as the canibus pun meh wasnt hitting hard for me .... Bar 3 .... Multies was flowing but YA fucked it on the last one you went from 5's then finished with a 6 Proc ..1 tol...2 a...3 gusts...4 first..5 date...6 im counting 6 there bruh !!!! And that pun is a jab at best but great flow ... Bar 4 .... Hernia refernce is bullshit too YA chest can't hollow from a hernia bruh hernia are in your lower stomach or groin areas no where near YA chest and then im sure it's a given ??? Huh YA just rhyming now and not punching .... Bar 5 .... Simple nice little closer but nothing WOW !!! There's ya breakdown fellas don't catch feelings just giving YA how it is ... .:X:. Voted: Shodan / JayImmortal
Posted on: 2014-10-09 16:03:20

I'm sorry I'm not going to wright an essay for my vote but I see how people would break this down bar for bar since both nigga's had only bars through out their verse's but what took it for me was more DIRECT punches, not weak personals, but the fact that his bars seemed more directed at his opponent. Keeping it real this battle is hot FV Voted: Shodan / JayImmortal
Posted on: 2014-10-09 16:49:50