this a good battle right here we went in like a mf lmao Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-10-06 19:30:55

yeah cake I remember the new age oulaws ..nice battle from ya both btw .. Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-10-06 19:58:38

BillyFlintstone, your use of quotation marks to highlight your rhyming words like "cake", "name", "Hi way" "Driveway" etc might throw some people off because how we usually highlight rhyming words here is by capitalizing them and when we see words in quotations, we're expecting some wordplay or metaphor and get disappointed when we don't find any. Just a heads up. CakedOut, your verse didn't have those issues and you did much better as far as complexity. There were a couple wording issues though..like "i'll CLEAN HIM KNIFED SIR." People don't talk like that in real life and it just takes away from the punch and what you're trying to say when you deviate from normal language in order to fit a rhyme scheme. Just a couple pointers. Keep elevating fellas. Vote's in. Voted: BillyFlintstone /
Posted on: 2014-10-06 22:44:34

billy- you had some interesting content here.. my complaint is your basic use of endrhymes.. ex. ya first bar, had basically a one syllable ryme... so unless your bars are haymaker punchlines and flawless, its gonna immediately bring down your verse especially here.... next you go off in a tangent within your verse, taking shots at cake wit couple basic dope inunendos.. but no real hard hitting anything... just pretty much cypherish bars, that waste space within your box to diss your opponent.. prolly your hardest hitting line was the pinoccio meta.... rest werent hitting at all.. CAKEOUT- i can appreciate the play on words here, wit the different puns even tho theyre basically the same words... the problem here, in the sentence itself the quotated concept isnt worded well to connect with the different stone age puns... ex.. 'faced these lines'? how does this relate to findin out stone's age? shouldve said since he 'face in these lines' facin' these lines... it reads better gramatically, and connects cause then a face in these lines are a insinuation of wrinkles.... but i applaud the out of box thinkin, clean up your wordin and that wouldve been hella dope.... the sells crack like a prostitute... naw fam... shits weak as hell... does it make sense ? yes.... is it a double meaning? yes... is it creative...nope... i wouldve said this dude 'sells crack', and it aint VIRUSES in ACTION..... Voted: BillyFlintstone /
Posted on: 2014-10-07 02:14:30

One Was Too Basic And Needs To Improve A Lot TBH, Pretty Much Co-Sign With NOBLE And Illo's Breakdowns On This. Other Wasn't Spectacular Either But They Won This With Better Set-Ups / Punches. Voted: BillyFlintstone /
Posted on: 2014-10-07 22:55:56

Noble nailed this with his expo billy pick up the lb traditions quick bro !!! You got potential however so keep at it ... Caked YEH you know the score been around too long however to be making simple wording issues ... Simples however .... .:X:. Voted: BillyFlintstone /
Posted on: 2014-10-09 15:40:50