In case you don't get it... serial killer is a role in that mafia forum game, and being gay is a criminal offense in Somalia and many other African countries. Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-07-27 23:50:22

Rain man was autistic but was a savant / rainbow dash is autistic and has a high iq but in the rain man movie tooth picks wher dropped and he counted them before they hit the ground ...CSG GL famo no h8 Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-07-28 12:41:09

King whut shouldnt of let up Voted: Shodan / KING WHUT
Posted on: 2014-07-29 20:53:06

im a fuckin "serial killer" but thats not why my GAME IT HAS BODIED EM you could only "hang-with-the-rest" if slain-in-the-west or PLAYING SOME MAFIA the way i “kill-this-faggot- cunt” like “queers-in-africa� �� or GAYS IN SOMALIA! ^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^okay, setup, multi reads awkward.. GAME IT HAS BODIED EM... ? doesnt sound like natural grammar.. wouldve read better as : im a 'serial killer', with GAME THAT HAS BODIED VETS, other than that,this one bar kinda reads like two different concepts... i wouldve picked one either build on the mafia or build on the somalia ,or gay concept... cause both had potential.. another thing too is watch the structure... the aaa scheme you got made the flow weak, too wordy.. i'd have shortened the first two lines, and added one more main multi to give it aaaa, smoother flow ..... kill this faggot cunt is another quoted phrase that was unnecessary cause you then redundantly added 'queers in africa'... and then GAYS IN SOMALIA... this is an extreme nono... whats the point of flipping your concept creativiely if your just regurgitating the same thing three times.. this is how i wouldve wrote it..nigga i LAUGH AT YA PUNCHES, cause i know they 'try to get close to rainbow', but start to VANISH WHEN COMING , so if whut 'touchin up a nigga',better HAND HIM SOME BLUSH QUICK, cause 'ya offense is gay', witout PASSIN SOME JUDGEMENT for AFRICAN JUSTICE/ Voted: Shodan / KING WHUT
Posted on: 2014-07-31 04:40:49

Normally,'i'd-get-hi m',but he's 'au-tis-tic', an I don't wanna waste TWO SPITS ON THIS DORK, so If you got' range I doubt it dog' coz those numbers in a drop 'rains counting on' hit lighter then TOOTH PICKS ON THE FLOOR!! ez ^^^^^^^^^^^o kay this was a slightly wordy shortbar structure... setup was pretty simple but relavent, i'd have lowered the syllable count on the first line, cause shits hella wordy, 22... i wouldve simplified to : ya bars i could 'dust 'n off ,man' but aint wastin TWO SPITS ON THIS DORK, the inner was a bit fillerish, and end punchline was again way too wordy.. fucks up your flow in that regard... other than than the concept is from an old reference but works... Voted: Shodan / KING WHUT
Posted on: 2014-07-31 04:55:04

this came down to a concept to flip that made sense, and was fairly creative, coupled wit relavence, even tho it wasnt that strong of a punch.. did the enough here.. fairs in. Voted: Shodan / KING WHUT
Posted on: 2014-07-31 04:57:20

Illo dust an off man ...good one lol good looks on the break down Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-07-31 05:25:09

. Voted: Shodan / KING WHUT
Posted on: 2014-07-31 14:46:05