GL Homi! Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-04-29 20:32:54

U2 fam. Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-04-29 20:37:10

My bad that first in* on rest, that u said made it a 10 shouldn't be there sorry ..prolly wouldn't change your opinion much Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-04-29 21:46:24

Two good guys two slightly disappointing verses in that even I could see some problems. The main from both was a lack of "wow factor" I felt one had a greater flow with his punches and the other had one stand out punch. Flow wasn't amazing but was better achieved by one. multi useage was also slightly better. Close on this I think. Voted: HeliO / Wizdumb
Posted on: 2014-04-30 13:30:57

dam this battle was pretty dope fellas winner slightly edged it wit a more structured connection of punches but still both had shit tht made me crack up good shit guys fairs in Voted: HeliO / Wizdumb
Posted on: 2014-04-30 20:53:36

One had wording/flow issues, but solid concepts. The other dude started off great & then his punches lost steam towards the end of his verse. That consistency issues lost him the match... FV in Voted: HeliO / Wizdumb
Posted on: 2014-04-30 22:57:50

Both gr8t concepts! Loser kinda basic but good! Not the average! wordplay decent multis on point! Winner just kinda had a stonger grasp on wordplay combined with his multies! But Both very good drops Gj! Voted: HeliO / Wizdumb
Posted on: 2014-05-01 01:28:41

ij Voted: HeliO / Wizdumb
Posted on: 2014-05-01 05:16:33

damn both came hard. my loser cam back hard in the end and made it close. I read my winner and he was just more consistent. no hate fair vote bruda. Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-05-01 05:49:50

really no winner hear both of you got me with something. Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-05-01 05:50:50

Alright, this came down to concepts alone, considering both have faults in similar areas. Helio: Your first punch was underwhelming, I felt like the first multi (CAKE IS SCRUMPTIOUS) was dead-space, unless it's an impressive multi, it comes across as filla when there's no relevance to the punchline. The slim can punch was played and has been done before, more creatively. I liked the consistency so far scheme-wise, at least. Next scheme you used was awkward and not very readable and the punch that came with it lacked a lot of clarity - you should have been clearer with your set-ups / used a more understandable reference. You then broke your multi chain with SPAT SOMETHIN DOPE(4) and then the "Two Metal Bodies" wordplay was below par, didn't make sense grammatically and didn't create a notable punch. The idea is good but it wasn't executed very well. The next punch was underwhelming - the multi usage here was confusing. You expect "Your Speech" to rhyme with "Ka-lif"? I thought that was incredibly lazy. Besides which, do you mean "Khalifa" or "Kahlifia" - because reading it creates a difference in syllables. Watch out for that. The reference to Mac & Devin was sub-par, the multi used for the punch was iffy, considering you only mention Snoop and Weed, it was unimpressive in the end. The next scheme was sloppy, although the actual punch at the end was very good - it was an impressive, subtle flip on his name. At least, I've never seen it done like that before. SMACK FROM HIS HARD rhyming with PART FROM KICK STANDS was awkward and forced. The closer was a continuation from the last concept, but it was a badly executed one so it fell off in the end. Your verse was decent, although you need to start working on creating solid, flowing schemes that aren't awkward and make sure your rhyming isn't forced! Work on holding those schemes for more than two bars also, it's more impressive that way. Try to look for more creative and harder-hitting angles on your concepts as well. Some good ideas but bad execution. Wiz: I liked your first scheme. First wordplay was only relevant to the first multi, so therefore it wasn't relevant overall to the punch. If the punch had Poseidon as the context, it would have been a good multi. If Poseidon was supposed to relate to Hydrogen because of hydrogen being part of the chemical formula for water, then it's way too unclear and therefore one to fly over people's heads. Your set-ups could have been more relevant: Yet again, the final reference and punch was clear and it hit. I actually really liked the pride reference. Scheme usage for that one was nice. I didn't like the Hyrule wordplay, considering that the pronunciation is "Hi-rule" and not "Hi-ah-rule"... So it came across as forced, linguistically and contextually also. Schemework seemed fine. 'Fairie by the neck' in the reference to Link was kind of cool. I'm also a sucker for gaming references, especially Nintendo and Capcom. The next few multis came across as forced and awkward. I felt like the keys/lock punch was played although the way you used it had some freshness to it. The next punch, which was a duo-punch, was quite creative: Going with a double entendre followed by a plain statement. It could have been executed better and the scheme-work could have been more polished. Overall, all I see is a lot of unnecessary wordplay, filler and dead space. Also, if a wordplay works, it doesn't mean that it has a place in your verse. Remember that everything has to foreshadow the punch. We're all guilty of it, but just keep an eye on that. Scheme-work for most of it was exceptional. This was a good battle, I have a clear winner based on their ideas being executed better and they were vastly better scheme-wise, which is very important. Vitty's vote's in. Voted: HeliO / Wizdumb
Posted on: 2014-05-01 18:15:54

gb some sick lines both had Voted: HeliO / Wizdumb
Posted on: 2014-05-02 07:54:05

It was a cool battle, but Helio got it Voted: HeliO / Wizdumb
Posted on: 2014-05-02 08:31:17

Not some of the best punches in the world, but good battle. Voted: HeliO / Wizdumb
Posted on: 2014-05-02 09:34:02

Gb one got this Voted: HeliO / Wizdumb
Posted on: 2014-05-02 10:29:49

Vitr.I never said smack from is hard j/s Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-05-02 11:15:07

Shit, I must have been tired. Sorry about that. My general point still stands. Voted: HeliO / Wizdumb
Posted on: 2014-05-08 00:00:19