Bnas:

I’m actually kinda disappointed with this verse. After reading one of your previous battles where you smoked a guy, you kinda did the opposite here. First off, you spelt Prosecutor wrong. Second off Pro-sec-u-tor is a syllable off from A-dopt-a-shoo-ter. Only one other broken multi, which deviated from the rest of the verse syllable-wise, which is “blood payer”, due to it having one less syllable than the rest of the verse (3 compared to 4. Your punches weren’t very good to be honest, most of them were self hype lines (Boss is cuter,Lead hands). You need an expo too because your wordplays and metaphors didn’t make sense. Your vocabulary was good except for some spelling mistakes.

Lilknight:

Best rookie verse of the month. Easily some of the best concepts I’ve seen on this site, yet you falter due to a poor execution, and lack of creativity in execution. Firstly, you need to sort out your formatting. You need to capitalize your multi’s, which brings me to point number two. Add multi word rhymes into your verse. People automatically wont vote for your verse if you don’t have multi’s. Even two word multi’s will get you farther than one word rhymes. Thirdly, make sure your verse makes sense. Your verse is all jumbled together which makes it hard to understand. Use proper punctuation. Fourthly, add some creativity to your lines. The folding chair line was a great concept with a terrible execution. Use something talking about how he folds like a deck of cards, or folds like Oniva (folding chair company). The smoke line is also a well used but still a good concept. Use a metaphor or wordplay to say he doesn’t want smoke.

Overall, Bnas takes it due to better vocabulary and actually having multi’s. Still, Knight should get credit for best first battle, as his concepts were better than most legends of the site.

This is a fair vote, meant to help others improve their work to the highest standard.

Bnas:

+ Good Multi’s

+ Great vocabulary

- Some broken multi’s and spelling mistakes

- Punches are a tad soft.

Knight:

+ Great concepts

+ Decent metaphors

- Poor Execution.

- No multi’s

- Poor formatting

winner here was just more complex with a better execution than his opponent along with nice multis. The loser kind of lacked the pow factor and could do with incorporating some complexity in his rhymes. fair is in

I honestly thanks for the advice. I don't care about winning or losing. I'm not going waste my time I always just battle to d.  I never had intention of caring how correctly formatted for a reading. it's my verse I always write or spitting my verse the way I want to. 

O yeah,  I'm not a rookie just only here when I'm bored. I barely rap anymore. 

Good job fellas

LIL - wasnt bad although you need to cap your rhymes i had to check twice the verse was pretty strong, however bnas concepts were more aggresive and the punches hit a lil harder gb tho fairs in no h8

First verse was superior in schemes and punches couldve dont better with wordplay's but this was enough to edge for me.

Second verse, still seems unstruchered and a runon scentence I did see a few rhymes but they came across as iffy, and the punches came off like a cypher writen with low punch power and not really for an oppenent.

GOOD BATTLE

Old school shit back from 2014 lol