#MURDA Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-02-14 13:13:12

EMDUB I like how you tried for more complex multi sets but duuude these were so forced. Fidel I disliked your repetition of "nigga", it literally became filler after a while. One had played concepts without sub par execution. Other also had some played stuff yet some lines had a bit of sting. My winner had more hits and his multi sets made a bit more sense, which led to better punches. Fair's in. Voted: BizzyOne /
Posted on: 2014-02-14 18:30:01

One kinda just focused more on multies here. The starting set looks like an 8 syllable but to be honest its 6 to the best. "ON THE" was repeated in all three sets so either you had avoided it or may be just not capped it. Do it from next time. Punches were average to the best. Now in the last set the syllable consistency was maintained but accuracy wasn't. Lemme show you .... MIND SPEAKS A FEW MEANINGS TIGHT --- TIME PEAKS DUDES THE EVENING TYPE ---- here mind speaks/time speaks rhymes. but A FEW MEANINGS - DUDES THE EVERYTHING is totally off while tight and type rhymes. So look after that. FIND HES A FOO LEAVING LIFE ---- BLIND KEEPS YOU FROM SEEING LIGHT ----- find hes/ blind keeps ok. YOU FROM SEEING LIGHT - A FOO LEAVING LIFE --- here, leaving life/seeing light can be considered but a foo/you from doesnt work at all. My advice for you is change your focus from multies to punches. think of the concept first then frame a punchline, then think a relevant setup to it and at last fix your multies. The bars would hit more. Overall you had average bars due to some played concepts and poor execution. Keep grinding. -------------------- - Other had some nice concepts as well as some played. I liked the See E Oh/CEO - Business related stuff. You woulda done much more from that yesterday news/ hitlist is dated concept tbh. Razor punch was fine.. overall your verse was quite decent but NIGGA AVOID THAT NIGGGGGAAA LOL it was some filler shit tho..you'd a wrote a line more had you deleted all niggas from your verse. My vote goes to the overall better verse as far as punches, smoothness of multies,metas and wordplay is concerned. Fair is in Voted: BizzyOne /
Posted on: 2014-02-14 23:42:55

both are dope but ma winner got some dope concept Voted: BizzyOne /
Posted on: 2014-02-15 05:11:20

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Posted on: 2014-02-15 08:38:16

Winner here was smoother on the flow definitely w/ better set-ups for his punch. Losers multis seemed forced in areas and some of the wp didn't make sense when used both ways which made it a little awkward. Had the right ideas, just didn't execute them properly. Winner had some decent wps also, a tad forced in some but nicely played in. Nice battle here, fair's in fellas. Voted: BizzyOne /
Posted on: 2014-02-15 18:18:26

Not a bad battle, both seems to have elevated since I last checked. I got my winner. Good battle. No vote to avoid conflict. Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-02-15 20:22:57

pretty good battle, one had some decent concepts but multis were a bit forced. he had one line that I thought was pretty original and the rhyme scheme tried to be pretty deep, but it was a bit off. the other had a little better flowing verse to me, had some pretty good wordplay and a little harder punches. some filler was def there and counted against him, winner had the better overall verse, peace Voted: BizzyOne /
Posted on: 2014-02-16 02:54:37

sick Voted: BizzyOne /
Posted on: 2014-02-17 00:37:07