expo: 'for moving but not using your head liek dullahan' = dullahan is a headless fairy who rides a black horse so thats hwo the 'lance' and 'fairy bars' connect to the punch as horseman usually carry lances. 'your bound to become 'meat for the bars' like JUDGING IN BIG COURTS' = 'meat for the bars' means sitting in a jail cell as judging in big courts is always against you even if your innocent, 'you wont lee lights again until your sentence is up like CLOSING THE FRIDGE DOOR' = he wont see light again until his sentence is up means he wont see the light of day until he finishes his jail time, and everyone knows that if you close the fridge door the light inside turns off. 'have you stepped on more than snails on pavements' = the fact that pretty much everyone steps on snails if they happen to be on the pavement...poor little things ahaha! Go2Sleep Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-12-03 04:30:09

I'll respond to this tonight after my daughter goes to sleep. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-12-03 19:29:04

Okay. One came alright, I felt he had an excessive use of filler, & it took way too long to get to the final punch, which turned out to be pretty weak. Multi usage was average, there was a slip up where he used the same word twice, had to take points off due to that. Concepts were cool, wish he would've executed them better. Other had cool ideas, one idea took up half the verse though, & seeing as its an 8 liner, every line counts. He threw a few jabs here & there to freshen up the bar, seeing as how he was dragging it out for the final punch, which was decent, & wasn't really worth it. Verse fell off towards the end. My winner was a tad bit more fresh this bout, I liked how he got personal for just a second, wish he would've developed that more. Fair's in. 'Spect. Voted: Arsine / ET the Refugee
Posted on: 2013-12-05 13:47:09

ONE HAS MA VOTE OFFA CONTENT ALONE, BUT OVERALL THIS WAS A NICE LIL SPAR. MABAD FOR THA ALL CAPS. but ma winner had some long ass lines for this to be a 8, might wanna tone that down alil for tha shorter battles, lets u get more puns in ALSO SOME THA PUNS WERE TOO OPEN ENDED. ma loser jus needs to hon his vision alil, his bars were all over tha place conceptually. But uuuuuuuh. THV. Voted: Arsine / ET the Refugee
Posted on: 2013-12-07 14:35:47

both are dope .. but winner work great on pucnhs i think loser waste to many of his lines in unrelated stuff .. nice reading though .. vote back on latest Voted: Arsine / ET the Refugee
Posted on: 2013-12-08 00:31:23

Well this is a complete breakdown since this ones closed and I see ET's comment on my voting thread. ------- Arsine ------ its seems im throwing my FUCKING HANDS at a TROUBLED MAN with MUDDLED PLANS whos still trying to 'lance' at me with his 'fairy' bars? this niggas STUCK IN TRANCE so i guess ill have you SNUFF THIS MAN for moving but not 'using-ya-head' like DULLAHAN!! -------------Couple of good rhymes there but nothing to call it as a punch. No punch, no meta, no wordplay. So nothing impressive. ----------- reading my bars he reconsiders like "FUCK IT, THIS KIDS RAW" because your bound to become 'meat for the bars' like JUDGING IN BIG COURTS and you wont see 'lights' again until your 'sentence' is up like SHUTTING THE FRIDGE DOOR! ------- Judging in big courts / meat for the bars thing was trash. Lights/Shutting the fridge door had some potential. But lacked in execution. Now I see you trying to keep relevance b/w bars, thats some good thing. keep dropping relevant barz and you'd improve instantly. --------- dont bother to step cuz if you do the SHADES GON AWAKEN to put BLADES TO YOUR RAIMENT & have you more 'stepped on more' than SNAILS ON PAVEMENTS!!! ------ Closing punch was average to the best but prolly the best bar of your verse. Think of some more creative concepts though, played shits won't work for you. ---- Overall your verse was pretty basic,keep your expos little, no one will read them if you drop them longer than your actual verse lol for mediocre rhyme game I would have rated you a Mid 5. -------- ET The Refugee -------- I'm 'board/bored' of your 'games' that you always POST IN THE CREW THREADS how you think you're 'making moves to be king?' You'd better GO AND PURSUE CHESS you'll need to 'check' in the 'e.r.'when i 'jump' you- i know. I've BROKEN A FEW NECKS (checkers, jump) i bet he won't come 'back gamin/backgammon' after i put a HOLE INTO DUDE'S CHEST!! ------- Your opening punch about chess was good. Check ers wordplay was forced as fuck. Same with backgammon. That just ruined your punches. Use valid wordplays from next time honestly, I clearly see there are some weak points in your basics.. ------ You need to 'tone it down' sayin your 'bars bang' like a XYLOPHONE. Psssh! You bang about as much as 'drumsticks' onto STYROFOAM! think I'm shook like a 'tambourine' whenever you WRITE A POEM? Please dog- you wouldn't leave me shook if i was a set of 'maracas'and you were a VIOLENT STORM!!! ------- now xylophone, tambourine , drumsticks , poem thing was average to the best. But i liked the way you make your concepts. The closer was trash to be honest, overall your verse had the best bar of the battle, the opener, other two bars were nonsense due to the failed wordplay, later the xylophone shit was okay - ish but your closer failed. --- I would overall give you a high 5 or generously a low 6 for better concepts, better punches and attempted wordplays and metas... Honestly I feel you'd have won this one.. but sadly #ROBBERY. no hate to the other guy tho. Just an honest verdict. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-12-08 09:44:56