Dawn - you have a lot of work to do. The simplistic one syllable rhyme scheme isn't going to earn votes around here. You didn't present a single punchline, either. Overall, a very poor performance... 187 - Your multis are on par, but I'd like to see some "inner" multis as well, not just at the end of lines. Really strive for more complex structures. From what I've read from you, you have a lot of potential. The punchline department needs some work though. I didn't see a single punchline in this drop. Honest vote in. Voted: Dawn Specie / 187 nEw eRRa
Posted on: 2013-10-31 04:30:23

fairs is in. Both need mad work, far to simple, lack of punches, I could go on day. Both need pratice in all areas espcially considering how good some of the battlers are on let's beef. Voted: Dawn Specie / 187 nEw eRRa
Posted on: 2013-10-31 05:49:40

Lol erra was fooling around but still a win is a win. fair here. No hate. Loser got to practice more Voted: Dawn Specie / 187 nEw eRRa
Posted on: 2013-10-31 08:04:35

gb fv Voted: Dawn Specie / 187 nEw eRRa
Posted on: 2013-10-31 17:53:59

BOTH NEED WORK A clear winner here. One had structure,Decent Multies, Other had no structure, Dident cap multies BOTH HAD WEAK PUNCHES BOTH NEED WORK HOPE TO SEE BETTER BATTLES Thats the FAIR!!!!!!!!! Voted: Dawn Specie / 187 nEw eRRa
Posted on: 2013-11-02 01:01:29