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Posted on: 2013-10-02 16:23:12

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Posted on: 2013-10-02 16:32:55

One had actually some fairly smooth multis but his punches were more like jabs...Need to incorporate better set ups and a more creative approach to have those jabs turn to haymakers. Also make sure that your multis aren't filler as they have to actually relate to what your trying to convey as your verse. My winner had a higher punch count here and went more for the attack on his opponent. Needs to work on set ups as well though to really land heavy punches. Fairs in high to high Voted: IzeLowe / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-10-02 23:08:44

Ize had a great flow, few if any punches opponent has some good worplay and landed a few punches Voted: IzeLowe / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-10-03 00:06:38

IZE- im impressed with your use of multis, seems you grasped that element of verse writing.. now i need you to focus those rhymes and turn them into relavent setups, to a relavent punch aimed at your opponent.. you also faltered in the last few lines.. ya multi's mismatched..syllable wise.. INDO- fairly decent use of multis, not too flashy, kinda basicish, but clean.. setups could be a bit more relavent to the endpunch.. ex. your first bar, concept was 'riding high' or sit on saddles... you couldve tied in those two by connecting it in the setup.. because sick wit battles and prick get rattled.. seems random, and dont seem to relate at all wit riding high.. nor saddles... this is considered to be irrelavent multis.. next bar was weak imo. you started off wit nothing to run wit, then you talk bout spraying ya street... so these essentially become two ideas, that went off in different directions.. anyway, i'll IM you on ways to improve, i dont give away trade secrets out in the open.lol.. anyway, winner here, had a more battle oriented verse.. that although a bit weak punchwise, was more consistent in other areas... fairs in.. Voted: IzeLowe / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-10-04 04:15:23

fairs in no h8 Voted: IzeLowe / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-10-04 13:04:49