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Posted on: 2013-09-29 04:49:11

Sean Cron: First things first, your flow was off in many areas, and there were a few broken multi's also. So that is definitely one aspect that you will have to polish up and makes sure everything is written smoothly and will flow well for the readers. As far as punches ther wasn't much in this area either and that was due mostly to the fact that your concepts were pretty basic and generic, and there wasn't much on the set up and to comply with the punches. overall you have the rhyming down with the exception of the few breaks, but there is alot of work to do here. Elevate it up.. Piff: First two multi's are off to me, First has 3 syll's second has 4 syll's even with the Back'T instead of back to.. Just bad wording there, I wouldn't suggest merging words like that to try and get the syll's right.. Still have basic concepts imo, Try using some nameplay or find some concepts that can be more directed towards your opponent, even if those are basic and generic also, they are better than normal generic lines with no direction towards your opponent. Overall beside the first line the flow was really nice. Still keep working on making those punches/concepts better though. Don't live around the bottom and get the easy.. Elevate and start battling the better heads on the site. Voted: Sean Cron / DOZAA
Posted on: 2013-09-29 12:11:37

fv Voted: Sean Cron / DOZAA
Posted on: 2013-09-29 20:14:52

e-piff be stealing this kids fate lol good battle but e deff took it with his overall steady flow Voted: Sean Cron / DOZAA
Posted on: 2013-09-29 23:02:25

damn piff killed it Voted: Sean Cron / DOZAA
Posted on: 2013-10-01 10:06:15

Congrats On The Win Piff. Wasnt Even Close. thats How i Want You To keep it. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-10-02 08:31:07