fv Voted: S T O Y / Plain
Posted on: 2013-08-01 01:47:57

Stoy was more clever/witty whereas Plain seemed to have keystyled but had a nice flow. I liked how Stoy maintained relevance to 9/11, planes and Muslim interventions from the second bar all the way through. I think Plain could have came with better bars if he had taken the time to craft them. Like I said, the flow was pretty decent and I see some potential. From a reader's perspective though, we don't want to just read rhymes cause we're already expecting that. We want something that makes us think...and to that end, wordplay and metaphors help out a lot. Thanks for posting guys. I got my winner. Voted: S T O Y / Plain
Posted on: 2013-08-01 01:53:12

Ok my winner had a better flow, not great, but better. One guy also just seemed to force things that weren't there and used a very simple rhyming style with multis not to be seen. That is something expected on this site, it will come with time. Fair vote vote back Voted: S T O Y / Plain
Posted on: 2013-08-01 05:06:05

one sided, winning verse is not that good, but had punches while the other verse was just basic rhyming, my vote is in pals. Voted: S T O Y / Plain
Posted on: 2013-08-01 07:10:28

APOCALYPSE !!!!! Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-08-01 12:29:54

My winner took this in all categories here so one was pretty much outclassed. My winner took this w/ consistency of punches and nicer use of his multis. The other needs to learn to incorporate punchlines in your verse in order for it to hit hard. Had some okish multis and your verse was sort of smooth but was missing any real creativity or lines that made you say wow. Fairs in Voted: S T O Y / Plain
Posted on: 2013-08-01 18:54:46

Good Battle. One stood out with better structure and multis within wordplay punches. RESPECT 2 both. FV in. Voted: S T O Y / Plain
Posted on: 2013-08-01 21:52:35

fv vb Voted: S T O Y / Plain
Posted on: 2013-08-03 16:46:18