Expo: Green Day songs are American Idiot and 21 Guns. A conscript is a person fighting in the Military. Bars as in prison bars or battle bars. Lennox was a boxer who held the world heavyweight championship. Final bar is wordplay camping you're in tents or im intense like serious ya know? vote fair. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-07 17:37:52

Ex- In my opinion, some of your multis were of and the punches could have hit harder, however i enjoyed the flow of your verse Dys- Your verse was abit more complex and organised and i thought your punches hit harder, and your multis were also better Voted: Explizzitt / Dysfunctional
Posted on: 2013-06-09 20:26:16

I cosign with Eth on pretty much everything he said. Explizzit your flow was nice and you had some good multis, but you gotta make sure the multis hit harder. For example when you said "gotta feeling but it's NOT A GOOD ONE" that multi just doesn't have any force to it, it's really a non-punch because it sounds so basic. When you're writing don't just use the first multi that fits and makes sense, give it some thought until you have a hard hitter. Dysfunctional your opener was silly as hell lmao i wasn't feelin that shit. The rest of the verse was much better, you should have scrapped that first line. You had some nice punches that were executed pretty well but try to avoid played out concepts like the prison bars thing. As far as the self-hype thing Eth was talking about, he's right, you don't wanna use that too much. I actually don't think you overused it really because at least you were involving the opponent in it. Like when you say "got this american idiot dodging 21 guns" that could be considered self hype but it at least focuses on the opponent as well. All in all one wasn't as flowy and schemey as the other but still had better punches so i'm going that way Voted: Explizzitt / Dysfunctional
Posted on: 2013-06-09 20:32:14

Not that it really matters, but I meant to go 6-5 on this not 6-6 Voted: Explizzitt / Dysfunctional
Posted on: 2013-06-09 21:04:12

good battle fellas. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-11 03:20:54

so, the sum of this is, I did good, not enough punches, on point throughout, great flow, more punches and i could have possibly taken it. It was a close one as i can see in the ratings. Good battle. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-11 11:35:46

Ok, Ex.....this dudes PHONY AS FUCK, i think his parent had a hard time GROWING HIM UP, but i bet his uncles didnt have a hard time SHOWING HIM LOVE!-----its hard to separate your bars because you dont really have setups and punches in here. This is kind of a diss, standard at that. youre gay, your uncle touched you, nothing that challenges or impresses the reader...... DONT EVEN RUN, you want a beef? your better off surviving when im THROWING THE CRUMBS!!.......not real clear what your saying here and isnt hitting much if at all...... i just hope you'll KNOW WHEN ITS DONE, cuz you aint worth my time in this is my arena, you suck so fuckin bad i WONT EVEN CUM!!! (come)....a little word play, the set up is there, but its a punch that damages both parties, it makes you seem gay too, dont let your opponant suck your dick, not a good look.... by the end of this ill have your career sunk in like RODDED WOOD BUM! lets face it, you aint GOT A HOOD SON, you 'needa jacket' (jack it), like you 'gotta feelin' but its NOT A GOOD ONE!!!!......again, closer wasnt strong, there is some merit to keeping a scheme the whole way through but nto at the expense of punches. Also did you mean rotted wood? Typo's can fuck you up pretty bad, this is text, spelling can be important, in this case your meaning is misconstrued because of it. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-19 18:47:53

Dys....This guy's a fucking goof he carries GREEN TAPE ON HIM. Carves it out now it's got LEAF SHAPES ON IT. Got this "American Idiot" dodging "21 Guns" like GREEN DAY SONG HITS......there was a punch there but it wasnt set up real well, and like EtH said, reusing the word Green in your multi takes away from it...... Your not "fit" for this "battle" you're like a WEAK MADE CONSCRIPT. Got you running from these "bars" like an ESCAPED CONVICT!....not a bad bar but the bars/jail/convict thing is one of the most played concepts in the game, so the impact isn't really there...... Bodies down we need MEDICS. I'm "skilled with punches" like LENNOX. What the hell were you FED-"EX". Cuz you "deliver male/mail packages" with NO PRETEXT......not bad but I've seen the male fed x play before, also ending the punch with a broken multi isn't a good look and really took away from the punch. Should have ended with your fed x play.... With every word this HOE DISPENSE. He digs a bigger HOLE INSTEAD. I don't think this bitch has NOTICED YET. This battle is like a camping trip they way I GO INTENSE/IN TENTS ......not an awful set up/punch but the intense/in tents word play is almost as played as the bars/jail/convict concept, it's just not gonna make anybody go "wow" you know.. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-19 18:52:50