one expo got cut out. sugar in (chagrin)-To mortify or discomfit Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-05 01:06:34

expo...... Ill Reem -------------- -------------------- --------------- tha t orange tag team scheme on your name looks CLOWN FOREIGN(for-reign), he probably stole the ELECTION, mr bush bean crook, I'll have you FLOORING in SECONDS. ---------- -------------------- ------------- The rhymes are completely off, and the concepts are missing, they look more of a mash up of concepts, not at all hard hitting,and the rhymes are forced. (1/5) ------------- -------------------- ------------ the only beef I'm expecting, is weeze in your sleep after check-in. you going on a rant for a piece, you'll dismantle the beast, and force winds on elite's with infection --------- -------------------- -------------- Ok if you started capping you rhymes,keep at it, it'll help you more.The bar became irrelevant and became garbage, keep at the level you were at the first bar. You'll get better rates and easier wins.(No Rating) --------- -------------------- --)----------Your music wouldn't murder reflections If you wrecked your compact, how the hell you pushin fat snacks after that concession. contact his next of kin. my steeze sweeping through the street with no sugar in. --------------- -------------------- -------- Same problem,concepts are completely muddled,it looks as if your trying to look tough but failing.Don'try or pretend,go w/ the flow. ------------- -------------------- ----------- I feel high on my knees, pure white snot when I sneeze like a mexican. Salute! ----------- -------------------- ------------- The bars don't seem to connect, and again, a mash up of concepts,leading to a really cheap look.Work on it. =============== ========= Ayo/COMRA DE ---------------- -------------------- ------- ..like any good kick returner i'm RUNNING THIS BACK, or a typical 'heroin fiend' becuase this is "ONE IN THE BAG"! ------------- -------------------- ----------- Ok, nice bar. But you had wording issues (like me) keep it short bro, and it would be more stingy.(3/5) ------ -------------------- ------------------ .. got a fifth thru ur script n like any typical bitch you -COME AT THE TAG & wish it was SOMETHING YOU HAD! WANT IT? TOO BAD!!.... --------- -------------------- -------------- Okay , good concept, ok execution.Again the wording problem, the punch lost it's effect, you could have shorted it, or used another connecting multi, to make it flow better. ----------- -------------------- ------------ .....t his Murda Muzik and you couldn't "Digest the Circle" if your STOMACH DID LAPS..hiding something?.. If Ill got '8 in the back' he getting FUCKED IN THE ASS --------------- -------------------- -------- Ok the problems w/ the previous bars, werent present and the bar was pretty fuking dope. (4/5) ------------- -------------------- ---------- ..lol... easy...SEE YA LATER!..ay don't "Take Time to Stop And Shoot" the "HEAT NO PACER"..cause i got "Miracle Deliveries" like JESUS MANJOR & he wouldn't live up to his name w/ 'stacks' of actuall "REEM'S-OF PAPER"!!!!../ ----- -------------------- ------------------ Another good bar, flowed well and had a ok punch.Good work. (3.5/5) =========== ============== From this i deduce that one is completely new to the battling scene. Other won it by sheer experience.One had a mash up of concepts,while the other threw some punches which created a landslide effect.Fair Votes In! eX... Voted: X Paces / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-06-05 02:01:11

=I won't that shit removed ASAP!= Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-05 02:18:49

GOOD BATTLE BUT THE FAIR IS INN Voted: X Paces / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-06-05 02:40:21

My bad. Props to Execute, as usual, leaving detailed remarks. You could probably think a little more out of the box or attempt to better explain how concepts are muddled. What exactly does that mean. A theme does not need consecutieve concepts. I usually write with a theme that goes on till the end. or i'll break off it the last bar or even line sometimes if it stings. doesn't really matter if it hit perfectly, the intent alone is BEEFY! See how there's a matter of taste involved. I'll stop there for now. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-05 03:10:00

no h8 Voted: X Paces / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-06-05 03:30:23

keep it moving, stoopid. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-05 05:51:50

lol, that 8 in the Back line lmao. And the actual REEMS Of Paper line did it for me, personally. gb Voted: X Paces / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-06-05 06:03:23

murda..bish! Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-05 11:08:18