FV Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-13 19:24:30

good battle respect to both one had iller concepts n punches..vb Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-13 20:40:22

This is a good battle indeed. Fair vote. no hate Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-13 21:40:55

vote captain for a better verse, Ryan was too basic... Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-13 22:01:53

fv Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-14 01:53:44

HOWDY - Your opner could have been fire but you had a broken Multi "ROCKIN' KATO'S DRESSED WHIP (6) and ROTTEN TOMATOES BEST HITS (7), nonetheless a clever concept, you actually had some very good concepts in there, Multis were spotty at times, Rhyming was very inconsistent int his one too with also a tad of filler near the end. Overalll: Just polish up your Multis and maybe even bringing your syllable count lower for a 8 liner. Vocab was good and the structure was nice. Not a bed drop but you have some minor flaws here and there. [Stand Out Line: 2nd Line]. RYAN - First and foremost cap them rhymes, its the preferred presentation on here and it makes it easier to read your drop. Develop a Multi game fam, structure your bars and try getting into a good rhythm with rhyming, also learn to set up your bars for the punch. Peek HOWDYs drop for a good idea for the basics fam and keep elevating. [No Stand Out Line].My wineer just was outclassed his opponent. Low To Mid. Fairs In. APOC: Scream On'em Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-14 03:28:43

fairs in guys Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-14 05:24:34

Lets look at what we got here ..... Captain howdy ... Shits in point fella in terms of concepts and a grasp of texting however you have got some minor flaws im your verses sylabel counts need addressing first bar there was a 6 then two 7 sylabel multis this was a good verse flexing some weight with ya spits overall 7.5/10 ..... Ryanbryan .... Ok from reading your verse i can see theres a lot of concepts in your head but you need to learn to utilise them in text the name of the game is quality of quantity so in your verse there where at least 10 concepts that could of been made into punches ... You only need 4-5 for a 8 bar battle read your opponents verse see how he builds his bar up then at the end theres a punch you also need to look into multi rhyming too see your opponents verse where he has CAPPED THE WORDS if you read them and just them you will see they rhyme with the next set of capped words these are multis and add another level to your verses and helps them flow .... FV .:X:. Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-14 06:37:50

Ahhh damn I didn't even catch that in my first bar lol. Shit won't happen again. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-14 06:57:38

Decent battle here, loser was cyphering the whole time. In all honesty I don't feel like wasting an expo on that. Simply, make sure to use punches directed at your opponent, nothing else at this point. For more on that, on me. The winner shows promise however you need to make your punches a bit more blunt so the effect isn't lost on people who may not be familiar with the concepts. Very good rhyming, just work on making your concepts have some form of closure. Pm for more tips and advice, Fairs in. Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-14 10:37:04

One took this in all categories, the other was cyphering imo but has potential. Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-14 22:03:03

Fv..... Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-15 00:07:26

fairs in. winner had stronger schemes Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-15 11:26:06

Easy win here. Winner is on another level and took this battle in every aspect. Other needs to step up the multi game and punchlines in order to become more effective when battling. Fairs in Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-15 23:06:48

Let me know if you need an explination. lol. Voted: The Law / RyanBryan
Posted on: 2013-05-16 14:26:09