good battle respect to both one had harder punches n wordplay..no hate vb Voted: Letum / Mc Hysterectomy
Posted on: 2013-05-11 21:11:44

Breakdown : Letum - your opener was decent.. I liked the concept and the set-up was ok.. Your execution was also ok.. Your flow is good and your multies could be better but are still decent... Your next lines(G TAKE A ROOG IN POP ME - FACE ME at a TOWERS TOP i'll DROP HEAT) were ok.. I wasnt really feeling the multies but the flow was still good and the concepts were ok but could have been executed a lot better.. Your execution was ok.. I'd say work on your build ups as well.. You got that main punchline down but work on maybe a build up for that line as well.. Your closer was decent but would have been a lot better if it was more of a punch instead of boasting but it was still creative.. The only problem with it was that it wasnt that much of a punch....... Mc Hysterectomy - your opener lacked some necessities.. tbh your whole verse did.. Instead of breaking down your bars i'll feed you some tips.. Provide us with 3-6 multies/rhymes and make sure they are more then 1 work multies.. Also set-up your punch with a reference of some sort like you did with the baby powder/ass punch but be a little more creative and original.. Work on your flow as well.. like try to use only 8-12 words per line like your opponent did.. If you want anymore tips then ask me.. Overall ok battle.. Voted: Letum / Mc Hysterectomy
Posted on: 2013-05-12 10:41:34

yall are GOOD! Voted: Letum / Mc Hysterectomy
Posted on: 2013-05-13 06:24:48

Fairs in. Voted: Letum / Mc Hysterectomy
Posted on: 2013-05-13 10:46:56