are you part of Apocalisp? NO! i'm waiting on your 8, anytime, feel free Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-09 19:40:03

so what....does it matter Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-09 19:42:05

if you were from Apoc then no. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-09 19:45:16

well who cares Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-09 19:46:33

besides you say something about it at the end...i didn't know till after Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-09 19:48:08

no stress, i just really hate some of them mofos. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-09 19:50:32

Ought let's look at this right huuurrrrr. .... Ill ... Why you hating on my crew ill iunno what we do to you ... Anyway looking at your verse even tho you coming a my crew imma give you some tips if you want to go after a crew or someone in the crew dont post it as an open otherwise someone else might take it and then your verse becomes irrelevant i.e this verse right here ... If you want to diss a crew or whatever do it either in the cypher section or send a closed battle and type a member of that crew in there and send it to them don't drop it in the open .... The verse its self is very basic for the text arena this would sound ight on audio but text is a step up n terms do writing the rhymes as we can't hear it we have to read it ... You need to look into multis and get ya self a more complicated rhyme scheme then ya need to up your metaphors and punches ... The content is there just need to focus on some areas .... EMDUB .... This verse was very weak also if ill reem had out his verse more as a direct insult to you he would of win but he is out done by what he has in his verse .... You need to up your rhyme scheme from one word rhyming thats kindergarten rhyming ma dude time to grow a pair and up ya game metaphors need work and if that p.o. Dub was an attempt at a wordplay you failed at it i see ya thinking on it but y pa didnt pull it off .... One wins this due to the others mistake unfortunately .... FV Voted: X Paces / BizzyOne
Posted on: 2013-05-09 20:19:11

FV Voted: X Paces / BizzyOne
Posted on: 2013-05-09 20:56:28

thx for the feedback X-Calibur, now go try to son somebody else Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-09 21:36:31

i gotta present it better and easier to pick up the rhyme scheme. but its so simple. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-09 21:41:26

One here had a more battle like drop here imo. Voted: X Paces / BizzyOne
Posted on: 2013-05-11 23:05:31