I see no reason as to why this should be deleted.You cant expect someone to up and post when you say jump.The battle stays have a mod delete the other one you sent out to someone else Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-04 21:27:09

Ok the next bullshit comment to come from either of you results in an infraction.I will be back to drop my vote after i set the audio gc brackets Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-04 21:31:32

Fraud*...Not Frauds*...Good luck homie Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-04 21:34:46

This is BS yo... but good luck... next time u say u are ready then make sure that means your verse is ready Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-04 21:37:45

Come on dawg, Atleast I replied within 24 hours you diig...I'm locked up cuzz...You ain't in my sitchuayshid .. Send me another 8 if you think you can Actually murk me cuz Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-04 21:40:12

This time u send... get your verse ready... hit me up then I will tell u when my verse is ready then we can do a BLIND DROP we are not doing multi round battles so I see no reason to give my opponent a chance to rebuttal my whole verse... Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-04 22:17:11

Dawg that shit happens to me all tha time... You can do a spin on my verse if you want it's all gee ... I'm not even in the mood to send righ' now so hold ya horses cuz dat 8 bar verse will be coming your way in a few days no doubt Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-04 23:46:50

Iight cool and I will have mines ready... I wont rebuttal your verse it will be straight personals... just let me know when u r done before u send... Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-05 00:42:25

The winner started off by cappin the wrong shit, u sorted it out after the opener but keep an eye on that as it affects the readability. U also started off quite random, infact rereading... The whole thing was quite random. I struggled to really understand the direction of this drop, it just felt a bit messy. U need to develop a solid structure to ur verse and then come up with your punch and then work from the punch outwards. What you seemed to do is come up with a scheme and then force everythin to fit around that scheme neglecting the punch and the set up. I would take a bit more time when writing, reread things and dont be afraid to admit if somethin it aint workin, scrap it and try it from a different angle. U were touchin on some nice ideas but they need to be harnessed to make them more specific and then developed to make them more complex. There were no stand out punches but frequent lil jabs which is good for momentum but u really need to work on the strength. My loser, firstly id say that there was too much filler. In ur opener there was way too much of a gap between ur 1st and 2nd multi, keep it short n snappy to keep voters engaged. All that brackets business wasnt really workin either, makes a bit confusin, just keep everythin coherent. U held ur multis ok in the first off and then completly lost it in the 2nd, almost like there were 2 diff ppl writing. Other than the opener, there wasnt really any other punch and although its good to see attempts at wordplay, if it doesnt come off then it looks pretty bad, leave it out if it doesnt sound right or if it does sound forced. U need to work on structure and consistency and punches. Punches probably 1st and then develop ur style once ur comfortable with puttin a punch together. Overall, a low tier battle with elements of potential but similar elevation needs Voted: APATHETIC / Profite
Posted on: 2013-05-05 06:08:38

William Houston - Ok the opener wasn't too good, i felt you stretched the bar too long to the next Multi also there was no punch at the end. Be sure to keep the bars always aimed at your opponent fame. The next bar is also similar, a early Multi stretched all the way to the next multi with zero punch, not a good start. Now for the 3rd bar i was hoping you would come out guns blazing but when i read it i felt this bar was full of filler and the wordplay & rhyming used here was some what ugly. BEEN A MAN doesn't sound like AN-A-KIN and its pronounced AN-A-KIN not AN-A-KAN so try working on your wordplay would be good, peep HOF RULE to see some great examples. Again the closer not very good, the first thing i saw was the broken Multi EX-TEND THE CLIP (4) and STIFF AS SHIT (3) so be wary of that next time. Also some more filler with a weak punch. Multis were on point but i felt they weren't utilized to full also till the end you had broken multi. Punches were very weak and needs some work, you had some decent concepts but the execution was not to great. Vocab could be polshed and the Structure needs heavy work on and also and CUT OUT all the filler and start being more complex and thoughtful with your rhymes. Overall Not a Very Good Drop. [No Line Stood Out Here]. SKYWALKER - Skywalker that opener started off well but then quickly went downhill, you decided to build on a smaller Multi and use big Multis as a setup for the small one as the final punch which in my opinion that was a bad idea, it took away the flow of your drop and the punch was weak also i felt the bar was half finished. You then went right into your 2nd bar and 3rd set of multis in the 2nd line! Your next lines had too much filler and the concept on this one just wasn't executed good enough on this bar, the setups were poor and the wording was messy. The punch barely packed some punch, this bar was not a good look. Ok the closer i was hoping this would be the decider n the battle but i was sadly wrong, you started it off with a super stretched bar and a lot of filler, the first Multi didn't come till 7th line, you used a whole line on setup. Thats too much and the flow was almost diminished by then. You also decided to end with a setup, not a very good closer. Multis were ok some bad rhyming in there, the punches could do with some thought, the Strucutre needs heavy development. [Again No Favorable Line] Not a pretty battle guys, very very tight battle so im going to select my winner on the drop i felt had more potential to win. Fairs In. Low to Mid-Low. APOC: Scream On'em Voted: APATHETIC / Profite
Posted on: 2013-05-05 06:12:34

*cracks fingers* lets take a look at what we got here then .... William ... ...bar1... I said this to you before you came to APOC you need to calm down on filler between ya multies i know you using interlaced multies in this bar but after "I speak from the heart" there's to much filler which loses the flow from you original multi coffin or a hearse thus making the bar sound kinda choppy and stretched ... The punch is more of a jab but i get what your saying with speaking from the heart 5/10 ...bar2... This punch is pretty dope but ya made the bar to short and build up to short ya stretched out a half assed first bar then your best punch in bar ya dont make the most of it 7/10 ...bar3... Wtf happened here its like someone else started writing ya verse the whole style changed and then all of a sudden ya capping words that don't have matching multies what you rhyming with BEEN A MAN??? Please don't say ANAKIN IN A CAN and that punch dont work as you got it all worded the wrong way around after anakin in a can you put like Luke's dad thats ya similie/metaphor which is meant to pack the punch so you got ya set up twisted in this bar very poor executionnp for me 4/10 ...bar4... Started off promising some played wordplays in there with the raps/wraps and deuce rags don't you mean doo rags if so meh wasnt hitting and what is with the ending STIFF AS SHIT why cap that when it dont rhyme with nothing flow was choppy as hell and for me a weak closer 5/10 ..... This was a verse that went from great potential to ending in a ball of flames that spears line was ya best shit in ya whole verse but the rest was not upto par with that ..... Skywalker .... ...bar1... Where ya punch where's ya metaphor/simile and the whole way then gay men multi thats kindergarten rhyming dude sack that shit off you can multi i seen you do it no real punch here for me was sort of a nothing bar just insulting him but not very well at all 4/10 ...bar2... Hmmm again no real punch ery time i read you shit and you put "something in these" im expecting a punch after it but there's nothing multis aint working in here for me either FRAUDS IS A FAKE, LORD THEN YOU PRAY & CHORES WITHOUT PAY yes there all 4 sylabels but say them out loud and tell me they all rhyme together .... Didnt think so ... Again a nothing bar really for me nothing hitting your opponent 5/10 ...bar3... Multies are better in this with ya interlaced multies i mean but they ain't really making any sense "shot rounds with stones chicks" whats that mean .... Then ya next multi after that is one syllable to many nothing really hitting in this for me .... 5/10 ...bar4... Again another one who finishes on a poor bar you both done this .... And ya multies don't rhyme again in this BEAST IN THE GAME, LEAVE YOU IN SHAME how you Hunan tell me BEAST and LEAVE rhyme ??? And the mellow bitch you should of just cut off completly and left it at swallow dicks ..... 4/10 ..... Ight there was only one stand out bar in this whole battle for me which could of been executed alot better .... Both y'all need to really look at ya verse's as there so inconsistent in terms of your multies and bar set ups .... Go look in setting up punches using metaphors and smilies think about your wording and how it sounds before posting ya verse and always re-read ya shit .... Some of these errors are real rookie shit like basic multi errors both are better than this ..... Fair Vote in RD1 .... .:X:. Voted: APATHETIC / Profite
Posted on: 2013-05-05 06:26:50

Was supposed to be Douche, I spelled it wrong, last bar was a double entantre however u spell it Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-05 09:04:55

Based Ones? Should be Banned Ones lol Voted: APATHETIC / Profite
Posted on: 2013-05-05 16:30:38

hahahahaha^ dont catch feelins. Voted: APATHETIC / Profite
Posted on: 2013-05-06 02:08:24

consistency took this imo Voted: APATHETIC / Profite
Posted on: 2013-05-06 20:43:21

fair vote return both yall :D Voted: APATHETIC / Profite
Posted on: 2013-05-07 10:00:45

fv no h8 Voted: APATHETIC / Profite
Posted on: 2013-05-07 19:43:42

fv Voted: APATHETIC / Profite
Posted on: 2013-05-07 20:54:03

fv Voted: APATHETIC / Profite
Posted on: 2013-05-07 22:02:33

both exhibited poor wording, and lacked relavence in setups.. multis were mismatched at times, which hindered flow a bit, wordplay concept wise, there was none worth mentioning, one tried but forced a few.. .. it came down to scheme complexity, and one excelled here to get my vote... fairs in Voted: APATHETIC / Profite
Posted on: 2013-05-07 23:34:12