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Posted on: 2013-05-02 20:17:32

Stack them can goods Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-05-02 20:36:11

This battle was a landslide here. One took this w/ abetter grasp of what a battle verse is and some jabs that had me leaning his way big time. Other needs to improve his multi game as well as learn how to incorporate punchlines into your game. Fairs in Voted: Oscaution / APATHETIC
Posted on: 2013-05-02 22:47:32

Agree with Dr Manhattan, the other got potential to grow. fair vote no hate Voted: Oscaution / APATHETIC
Posted on: 2013-05-03 01:02:35

Fv, no hate but a clear winner here Voted: Oscaution / APATHETIC
Posted on: 2013-05-03 07:32:06

Straight battle here. Oscaution- I saw a few attempts at wordplay here. Make sure that you quote those to draw attention to them. However I also saw some played lines and just weak lines in general that you need to learn how to just augment conceptually. Also very simple rhyme scheme with a few broken multies. Will- Didn't really get that techs/tex wordplay. You had a good momentum goin with the multies but you kinda dropped the ball towards the end with superfluous repetition. You had a few broken multies as well. You're heading in the righ direction though as far as structure but you also need to work on upping your concepts. Overall my winner showed more consistency and just a higher level of complexity. Pm for tips and advice. Fair's in. Keep elevatin. Voted: Oscaution / APATHETIC
Posted on: 2013-05-03 16:00:32

Votes in VB my niggas Voted: Oscaution / APATHETIC
Posted on: 2013-05-03 20:46:49

My loser came really soft. Half the shit didnt rhyme the other half didnt make sense. U need to have a look around site check out other battles to give u an idea of wot a battle of verse should be like. Id say to start off, braimstor, ur ideaa first, come up with a punchline and then work around it, if u dont think it sounds dope then scrap it and start over. Once unget the hang of it then u can progress on multis wordplay etc. the winner, alhough not top strong of a drop, was better in every category. Although watch out for repititon, u did it a few times and it aint a good look. U have a fairly decent grasp on multis, id like to see u try with longer schemes tho that arnt as simple. U need to work on ur concepts and make sure the punch is relevant to the setup cuz sometimes u were just throwin in random shit that didnt make any sense, so keep it reabable Voted: Oscaution / APATHETIC
Posted on: 2013-05-05 04:47:42

OSCA - Key thing to work on fam, Structure: Your bars are everywhere, proof read your drop fam and tell me do you have a good flow to it? A smooth read? Because for me it doesn't flow to well, so yeah clean up that structure heres some Current Battlers who i think have solid structure that you can check out: EtH, Phenomonon & HVK. Next is your Multis: This easily can be learnt but can be a headache to master, you had simple 1 word rhymes but on LB you'll def need more then that noes you bump into a fellow similar battler like yourself, so up that syllable count but MAKR SURE THE SYLLABLES ALL ON POINT WITH EACH OTHER. Check out: X-Cal, R o w & Fayz. Last but not least is Punches, these are your weapons and when they don't hit well then you can expect a lot of problems. Concepts will help here and i see you have some good ideas here but they all need work so those punches can land flush. So yeah keep learning and also peep Williams drop to learn a thing or two, You never know you might get a crew spot there. WILL - Some ok lines here and there, i've seen what you can do but i'll give you a short expo. Repeated the "Threshold" line but and some bars were a bit stretched. The structure could be more tighter and the setups could be more polished but other then that a near decent drop. [Fav Line was the O[Opener] Fairs In. Mid to Mid. APOC Scream On'em Voted: Oscaution / APATHETIC
Posted on: 2013-05-05 05:01:26