I would take this, but I'm going to let someone else have this. Good luck though, and keep elevating. Voted: Temp uk / HappySickness
Posted on: 2013-04-13 19:02:45

thanks bro :) Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-13 19:03:50

Better temp your shit is getting better battle by battle you've just got to up your rhymes from one word rhyming to multis so multiple rhyming words .... Then look into throwing in some metaphors .... Happy sickness ya verse was ok very basic no major metaphors or punches decent t flow and structure and the odd use of multis .... Good battle both keep elevating ..... VB VBF .:X:. Voted: Temp uk / HappySickness
Posted on: 2013-04-13 19:32:59

I see the potential in UK, but he's not attacking his opponent, so I can't give him the win. Word of advice temp uk when you're battling,you want to diss your opponent, not their girlfriend or mom, or anything like that unless you're talking about them as well. Like I said you have potential, and you're getting better every battle, but like calibur said, you need to start using multis, and metepahors,Happy sickness your verse was alright, but you need to elevate also. Anyways the fairs are in, voteback Voted: Temp uk / HappySickness
Posted on: 2013-04-13 19:46:51

Meant to say Darth vader Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-13 23:25:35

one was better da winner is Voted: Temp uk / HappySickness
Posted on: 2013-04-14 01:26:19

Both guys were using really simple rhymes - one guy, even though his rhymes were probably even simpler, managed to keep to a scheme. The other fell off slightly. Good luck to both. Fair votes, always. Voted: Temp uk / HappySickness
Posted on: 2013-04-14 06:12:25

temp you improved loads,i havent seen much from the second guy so cant say anything..but a good battle Voted: Temp uk / HappySickness
Posted on: 2013-04-14 14:39:26

one came wih harder punches Temp, make your flow lessy choppy. try and look for harder punches, with better set ups Voted: Temp uk / HappySickness
Posted on: 2013-04-16 17:27:18