damn I was going to take this battle, but x caliber killed this shit. Good. shit bruh. The fairs are in. Voted: X-Calibur / Temp uk
Posted on: 2013-04-13 17:55:45

da winner is... Voted: X-Calibur / Temp uk
Posted on: 2013-04-13 18:40:34

Experience won this one, Temp rhyming needs more depth thats where multis and structure and concepts come in. Also try filling the whole box. Fv In. - Give'm The Cold Shoulder Voted: X-Calibur / Temp uk
Posted on: 2013-04-13 22:00:18

More time in the ring here is why one took this and it really shows. One took this convincingly w/ an overall better verse. The other needs to watch some live battles or check out some of the better guys on the site (UA, RULE, Reefer) and get a grasp of what real battle bars are. Fairs in Voted: X-Calibur / Temp uk
Posted on: 2013-04-14 15:50:29

weak on both sides.. one simply had more complexity Voted: X-Calibur / Temp uk
Posted on: 2013-04-15 01:46:01

My choice got this with stronger and more creative punches but both need to fill in the box.. Here are some tips for Temp uk - Multies - Be sure to always provide multies that are at least 3-6 syllables cuz multies help with the flow and punch and if you dont know what a multie is then its the words that rhymes with each other when your going from line to line.. And always make sure the syllable count is exact and dont force your multies which means make sure there relevant... Take this for example again.... 'Class is in session for ya hoe', so as my belt BUCKLES SMOTHERED im RAMMING LIPS I gave her 'sex ed' and she passed the 'educational facial' with "no TROUBLE UNDER STANDING DICK".... The words that are capitalized are my multies... So the words that are capped in my 1st line rhyme with the words that are capped in my 2nd which makes them multies... Always cap your multies and also always fill in your box... Set-ups - These are very important because they make the punch stronger... I showed you an example of what a set-up is when i was explaning the importance of punchlines... Always make sure your set-up has relevance to your multie/punch or else it will be seen as just filler... Your set-up leaves the reader wanting more and be sure to make your set-ups stand out by putting something around them such as ' ' or " " or ` ` will work just fine so that the reader knows exactly what your talking about... Do not decorate your verse either with different types of symbols like ~ or // or anything of that matter... Punchlines - Punches should always be executed strongly and in order to do so you want some strong set-ups with good concepts... Heres a bar of mine i used in the past...'Class is in session for ya hoe', so as my belt BUCKLES SMOTHERED im RAMMING LIPS I gave her 'sex ed' and she passed the 'educational facial' with "no TROUBLE UNDER STANDING DICK"... Everything inside of the ' ' has to do with class and oral favors lol so those are set-ups for my punch which is inside the " " and the use of understanding was used as wordplay cuz under standing dick means under an erect dick and understanding dick means she understands it... You wanna provide punch after punch after punch and humiliate your opponent....Great concepts - Talking about someones mom is old unless there is creativity involved with it but the concept is very juvenile so try speaking on things that are going on in the news or with celebrities or evening talk about a volcano but make sure you convert it into a punchline and attack the hell out of your opponent.. theres so much to rap about and saying someones mom is fat or a hoe is very basic... Voted: X-Calibur / Temp uk
Posted on: 2013-04-15 16:52:34

thanks for the advice Phenomonon i took it all on board Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-16 03:36:40

both need to fill the box. fairs in. Voted: X-Calibur / Temp uk
Posted on: 2013-04-16 07:51:04

NOT THA BEST VERSE IVE SEEN FROM BOTH SIDES BUT THERES NOT MUCH IN TERMS OF A CONTEST HERE.....TEMP IF YOU WANT A LIL ADVICE IN SOME QUICK ELEVATION TECHNIQUES PM ME.....FAIR IS IN....holla Voted: X-Calibur / Temp uk
Posted on: 2013-04-16 11:37:43