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Posted on: 2013-04-12 13:03:36

Ok D your verse first mo tales is forced it doesn't work for motels and in her section doesn't say intersection felt both these wordplays where forced which made the bars forced and they didn't connect for me fam .... Ya shit was flowing liked the personal about the crew and flipping the sign that line was ight the archery lines was not bad either but just wasn't hitting that hard for me Punches: 7 Wordplays: 5 (to forced) Personals: 8 Multis: 8 Flow: 6.5 (wordplays threw it off) .......... RoWW now your verse I have to say I hate cats who feed of the other dudes verse not cool brother be more creative so using his multi in first line is a certain no no for me but moving on from the the piston bawl line was ight nothing KO ish but it was there felt the wordplay in d fault nice lines but that should have been the finisher to that line not the heart and heels part bore row lime was nice like that Ian ... Flow was nice wordplays where rolling build ups where ight a good solid verse Punches: 8 Wordplays: 7 Personals: 7 Multis: 8 Flow: 8 ...... Props to both nice battle here two good verse fair vote as always retun the fair VB .:X:. Voted: DaLinQuinT /
Posted on: 2013-04-14 05:32:42

Hmmm pretty close battle here. Delinquint- you had some good lines, but you lacked consistency. You started off pretty weird got in one or two good punches and then dropped the ball at the end. I attribute this to some forced wordplay and some concepts that didn't really make sense or at least the execution was lacking to the point that it really detracted from your lines. RoWW- you had some hit and miss lines. You were more consistent and were a slight margin above your opponent in that aspect however, some mixed up wording, technicalities, and forced wordplay really held your verse back. Overall my winner was more consistent and displayed a somewhat better grasp of structure. Fairs in. Keep elevating. Voted: DaLinQuinT /
Posted on: 2013-04-14 13:16:19

Somewhat of a close battle here. D: you have some pretty forced wordplay and you don't need to put 'this in if it isn't a set up' You had a couple of nice lines...I was digging the row/noose bleeding punch that was probably your best line of the battle. However you were inconsistent and your structure looks awful which effects how the readers looking at your verse. Up the creativity is what I have to say. RoWW: Your opener was pretty nice and you strayed away from the forced wp and it actually worked for the first line...Didn't hit that hard though. Never use defeat wp it is the most played thing on the site. You had some consistency issues as well in this bout but nevertheless your concepts were a bit more creative and your closer was pretty nice. Fairs in fella one took this w/ a cleaner verse and more consistency. Low to High Voted: DaLinQuinT /
Posted on: 2013-04-14 15:23:09

BOTH USED A FORCED WORDPLAY tut tut lol, BUT ALL IN ALL THIS WOZ A DECENT READ FROM BOTH SIDES....NOT GONNA SAY TOO MUCH AS DONT WANNA BE ACCUSED AS AH SWAYER BUT LINE FA LINE RHYME FA RHYME I GOTS A WINNER....holla Voted: DaLinQuinT /
Posted on: 2013-04-16 13:49:49