one didnt have much punches, the other had a better drop, harder hits. one just talked about smokin. not much of a battle lol. fairvotes in. Voted: Profite / Jakk Junior
Posted on: 2013-04-10 11:45:48

Pretty poor battle here. Jay- I didn't count any legitimate punches. You were doing mostly pure disses and cyphering. The one thing that you might have had going for you (multies) was broken in several places. You had a very simplistic rhyme scheme that just added to the verses inconsistency, and no real concepts. You were saying some nonsensical type shit too (ie Shave your ballbags and girls lick my nipples.........smh) . A lot of shit to work on here. Aggs- Your verse wasn't much better. While you did throw an occasional jab, they all severely lacked conceptuality. First of all, only quote wordplay. If you cap your multies you don't have to quote them that just makes reading the verse harder. Your concepts really held no weight, like that flame line. There was no real depth that went with any type of subtle reference. It was just a diss disguised as a half-assed punch. Another thing that I want to stop before it becomes a habit is your tendency to conform to your scheme. While scheming makes part of a good verse, you must not allow it to completely alter your lines and concepts to the point of nonrecognition. For exacmple, disabled retard rhymign hated regards. Hated regards makes no sense. This gives your verse poor wording and really detracts from any kind of effectiveness and/or credibilty you have. Overall my winner just seemed to have a better grasp of what a punch is, but thats about it. Alot of room for improvement here. Fair's in Voted: Profite / Jakk Junior
Posted on: 2013-04-10 21:57:32

one came justa bit over Voted: Profite / Jakk Junior
Posted on: 2013-04-14 01:07:41

okay gododyu Voted: Profite / Jakk Junior
Posted on: 2013-04-14 04:09:14