def my grasshopper..im helping the kid elevate and this round 1 of many to come ppl.give em advice to get em in the riight direction.. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-03-03 15:53:37

mmmm ok but one sided.. yo DEF gets some multies in there and play with words instead of rymes after forced ryhmes... but the thought is there and to me no one is a loser just what is better//// Voted: Def Threatz / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-03-03 15:57:05

fv, dopeee Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-03-03 15:58:54

poor expo'ed vote deleted 7-7 Voted: Def Threatz / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-03-03 16:10:29

DEF- i see potential in how you craft your concepts to flips.. only problem you got is your lines are runon, you need to shorten your bars fam.. otherwise it throws flow off, especially how you got the inner multis so far from each other as well as the main end rhymes... MIND- a weak effort imo, but your structure and schemes were a bit more polished, and a few concept/puns, landed a bit.. both need work and i felt, one was more consistent in his bars.. fairs in Voted: Def Threatz / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-03-03 16:18:19

both was ok on on the story..no piecing it together a lil diff story..MIND was almost too much on decoration with the //!!--didn't know to stop or keep goin..almost like intentionally underestimating yaself to way the odds..NOBLE..but always give it wut it is and I know ya structure way better..Def verse almost sound nervous in the since of how it was pieced together..one of those moments that after u send the verse and then read it one more time but noticed it too late to make the changes kinda thing IMO.. Voted: Def Threatz / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-03-03 16:49:03

The losing verse seemed forced the entire time, not to mention there was no wordplay. The winner here wasn't too creative but had better multis. Voted: Def Threatz / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-03-03 17:52:30

I been real busy dawg but im glad to be back and im looking to improve and Mind Fuck has been helping me a lot Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-03-03 19:31:46

Shits Classick!!! Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-03-03 19:51:04

Not much to say that already hasnt been said from ILL.. Def - provide somewhere around 10 words per line to help with your flow... You got the right ideas its just your flow isnt all that good when your lines are packed with words and set-ups... Mind fuck you know what it takes, you were just not as consistent as you could of been.. Overall decent spar... Voted: Def Threatz / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-03-03 20:07:15

Def: You need to shorten your words between multis. You have the idea right for concepts/punches and your multis are nice but with the words that drag on in the set up it really effects the flow which then effects the readability Mind: I've seen better from you before and your first half was pretty weak with no real punches thrown. Your flow was mad nice and your second half had a couple of punches that landed pretty nicely Overall a nicer read and better executed punches is what took this for the winner. Fairs in Voted: Def Threatz / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-03-04 01:06:33

fv no h8 vb Voted: Def Threatz / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-03-04 01:22:10

Voted. Voted: Def Threatz / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-03-04 13:05:41

nice Voted: Def Threatz / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-03-04 13:08:51

Classick Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-03-04 19:01:48

One was just better all around. Voted: Def Threatz / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-03-04 22:19:29

votes in, pm me for expo. battles straight though.. Voted: Def Threatz / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-03-05 10:10:54

Def - I think you're just trying to much with concepts, wordplay, it was little confusing Voted: Def Threatz / Mind Fuck
Posted on: 2013-03-05 16:45:47