expo: She goes to the asian black market to get another hand*a asian hand* nazi with an asian hand. dick and bank balance in a country called BankCock(bangkok) Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-03-03 11:03:35

nice lil spar..i think it kinda one sided tho IMO..pretty face jus masked the gals skills homie..don't take no one for granted cuz all kind of potential in here in diff ways.nice drop yall..need n e help on simple structure or n e thng..holla..if I can help I will.gb vb Voted: LilDoDirty /
Posted on: 2013-03-03 11:46:38

Gave it to the one that made sense to me and felt like it had more punches Voted: LilDoDirty /
Posted on: 2013-03-03 12:52:53

Both need to elevate seemed pretty basic Voted: LilDoDirty /
Posted on: 2013-03-03 13:01:50

My choice got this with slightly stronger punches... Here are some necessities to winning a text battle... Great concepts - Talking about someones mom is old unless there is creativity involved with it but the concept is very juvenile so try speaking on things that are going on in the news or with celebrities or evening talk about a volcano but make sure you convert it into a punchline and attack the hell out of your opponent.. theres so much to rap about and saying someones mom is fat or a hoe is very basic... Punchlines - Punches should always be executed strongly and in order to do so you want some strong set-ups with good concepts... Heres a bar of mine i used in the past...'Class is in session for ya hoe', so as my belt BUCKLES SMOTHERED im RAMMING LIPS I gave her 'sex ed' and she passed the 'educational facial' with "no TROUBLE UNDER STANDING DICK"... Everything inside of the ' ' has to do with class and oral favors lol so those are set-ups for my punch which is inside the " " and the use of understanding was used as wordplay cuz under standing dick means under an erect dick and understanding dick means she understands it... You wanna provide punch after punch after punch and humiliate your opponent.... Set-up s - These are very important because they make the punch stronger... I showed you an example of what a set-up is when i was explaning the importance of punchlines... Always make sure your set-up has relevance to your multie/punch or else it will be seen as just filler... Your set-up leaves the reader wanting more and be sure to make your set-ups stand out by putting something around them such as ' ' or " " or ` ` will work just fine so that the reader knows exactly what your talking about... Do not decorate your verse either with different types of symbols like ~ or // or anything of that matter... Multies - Be sure to always provide multies that are at least 3-6 syllables cuz multies help with the flow and punch and if you dont know what a multie is then its the words that rhymes with each other when your going from line to line.. And always make sure the syllable count is exact and dont force your multies which means make sure there relevant... Take this for example again.... 'Class is in session for ya hoe', so as my belt BUCKLES SMOTHERED im RAMMING LIPS I gave her 'sex ed' and she passed the 'educational facial' with "no TROUBLE UNDER STANDING DICK".... The words that are capitalized are my multies... So the words that are capped in my 1st line rhyme with the words that are capped in my 2nd which makes them multies... Always cap your multies and also always fill in your box like i do... Also spell shit right so its an easier read... If you need anymore help or dont understand anything then pm and I'll break it down even more.. You can also check out some vets to see how to structure your verse... Try being as creative as possible... Voted: LilDoDirty /
Posted on: 2013-03-03 19:45:47

Can't really say anything Phe hasn't said already. You need to be creative. Taking dick, and having HIV and being a nazi is nothing new. Its been done to death. Like Phe said, everything can potentially be turned into a punch, so use something that hasn't been done or at least make an old concept fresh. Also, use multiple syllable rhymes. Ellie has 2 syllable multies goin and they worked for the most part but adding more syllables makes your flow dope and adds complexity. Shit like HTTP Yart, ok thats new and hasnt been used much before but nobody knows what it means. Be relavent, if people dont get your shit they arent gonna vote for it. The less you need to explain your shit the better off you are. In live battles cats dont get an oppertunity at the end to explain their bars. Im giving my vote to the person whos flow was nicer and who was a little more creative with the verse. Voted: LilDoDirty /
Posted on: 2013-03-03 22:03:59

gb Voted: LilDoDirty /
Posted on: 2013-03-04 11:43:07

my girl Ellie got this by a long shot. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-03-04 16:33:34

Fv Voted: LilDoDirty /
Posted on: 2013-03-04 16:59:00

she a Nazi with Asian INHERITANCE that line did it for me Voted: LilDoDirty /
Posted on: 2013-03-04 17:08:14

This is nice, live battle im feeling both verses but the bankcock line made me laugh haha Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-03-04 17:21:08

i need you both to send me either an 8 or a 16 ASAP Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-03-04 17:26:11

Mokanes vote deleted. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-03-07 09:01:39