ones punches were harder... fuck rank Voted: tOxIc cHiC / Execute
Posted on: 2013-03-02 11:48:44

toxic- considerin that your fairly new to this,my advice is to work on tryin to integrate more complex endrhymes, rather than single syllable type word, it makes for better flow,anddoesnt make your verse look like something from the 80s ..also read battles from higher tier battlers.. learn to integrate metaphors to diss your opponent.. EXECUTE- very disapointed fam.. alot of forced multis, ex. PSYCOTIC LIKE REAL FLAMES PROWESS? it reads awkward, and when that happens , a multi falls into the category as forced.. wtf is real flames prowess? and it aint even a simile or relatesto each other.. neverdo thatish again. alot of irrelevant multis thruout, no cohesive idea, wit theexception of the gang bang line,which ended basic... what i did like is you tryin to incorporate complex rhymes, but in doin so, made your verse flow awkward.. if you need advice pm both of you.. i got my winner wit a better flow, and cleaner .. Voted: tOxIc cHiC / Execute
Posted on: 2013-03-05 02:32:12

fv Voted: tOxIc cHiC / Execute
Posted on: 2013-03-05 15:25:59

Good shit FV IN!!! Voted: tOxIc cHiC / Execute
Posted on: 2013-03-05 15:43:34