are you gonna respond to my battle Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-12-22 12:15:50

Yeah I'm typing it now. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-12-22 12:19:49

Expo: Evil Kinevil(However you spell it) rode Motorcycles, he jumped over the 'Grand-Canyon/Cannon '.. Pain-Brush, Paint-Brush, Michael's sells arts & crafts shit. ''Dude a bitch'' New-Gen-a-SIS/Sister , Genesis.. Jesus created a 'Women out of a man' in the 'Creation story'.. (Fire bar there.) 'Imprint a good line'/Finger prints. 'Push an Ale-Bum/Album' Ale is Beer, hence Alcoholic homeless dude.. Freddy Kruger's face is burnt, hence 3rd degree burns/Burner.. Drop the K from Kruger and it says ''Ruger''/A rifle/Murder weapon.. ''Hold the wood'' a cane is made of wood usually, ''Puff Mary/Jane w/ Dick & Jane bar.. ''Carrey Cock'' Jim Carrey Stars in Fun w/ dick and Jane.. (Don't over-look that.) Windows 97.. the COmputer/Workman's COMP.. GL, ACzzzzz Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-12-22 12:37:10

Good battle fam, you actually made me gain a little respect for MC's on here. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-12-22 13:06:42

Thanks man, appreciate the feedback. Not gonna lie, at 1st glance I thought you were gonna be noobin' it up cause ya new, but you actually have a sick-flow. You need to just take out the cypher material & make it all battle and I can see you being a problem in the future. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-12-22 13:09:49

Yeah I never really battled before but I wanted to just get another opinion on my shit and I feel like no one pays attention to the cypher part of the site so I'm just tryna transition. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-12-22 13:13:26

Yeah, the cypher section is a good place to get multies & vocab down. That's what happened to me, try incorporating more wordplay into your bars. Like that Capone & AL-Chemist concept is sick you just need to build around it, you know? Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-12-22 13:23:47

That's love man I'm gonna take your advice you'll see me on here quite often on here and when I feel confident enough I'm gonna hit you up with the round 2, thank's for taking the time to help another MC out man. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-12-22 13:28:31

No problem, that's what this site's for, helping each-other get better. PM me if you need any help or advice. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-12-22 13:39:41

AC giving a helping hand. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-12-22 16:57:49

good stuff no h8 Voted: Kaneval / Obey
Posted on: 2012-12-22 17:42:26

I appreciate the love, guys sorry about the wonder dawg battle he just called me out. And I'm gonna try and CAP my lines better. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-12-22 19:15:46

Interesting read. I have to say that one here sticks out to me as a cypher. Started off on a bit of a tangent, without much direction towards their opponent, as if it was a symbolic piece of poetry. I enjoyed some of the vocabulary used and quite a few of the concepts; there wasn't exactly any punches in the verse, apart from a few unclear concepts that could be viewed as hits. Overall, I'd say it doesn't belong in the arena, something for the cypher section: Rating goes to the vocabulary. The other verse was alright. Nothing special. I'm disappointed to see a lack of true multies. 1-2 syllables in a rhyme certainly takes away from the sting and flow of a verse, especially when trying to craft punchlines. On the upside, there were a few decent concepts in there, if a little played: "Squeeze the metal: Bike breaks" is alright, quite played in my opinion. The Adam & Eve concept is vague, needs more references. Pain/Paint is NOT a valid wordplay; to make that work, you would have had to have a word beginning with a 'tuh' sound after the word pain. For example, "Pain touch" would have made "Paint"... of course then, you would have had to craft another concept. It's all about balance. A nice few cracks at wordplay. "Ale-bum" was a little vague. The phrase "Drop K" needs to be explained for the Ruger punchline. The Jim Carey line was alright. Jailed Nymphos, meh, very forced. The closer worked, but the wordplay use of "comp" has been done a million times over and is most certainly dead by now. This was one-sided, nethertheless, both emcees seem to know what they're doing. One just needs to start crafting punchlines, using that vocabulary and creating concepts. The other is certainly getting the hang of it, just needs to avoid the played lines and start getting more creative and unpredictable. There's my analysis. Vitty's vote's in. Voted: Kaneval / Obey
Posted on: 2012-12-23 16:26:25

I appreciate the thought put into Vit and I'll try and work on that. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-12-23 16:30:11

The fair's in. Both battlers have alot of potential, just need the right mixture of elements to execute the perfect punch. Voted: Kaneval / Obey
Posted on: 2012-12-23 16:41:40