Both need a little work towards their verse. But the fair is in. Even challenge here. Voted: Illestwhiteman / OnlyRel
Posted on: 2012-12-16 00:13:17

fv Voted: Illestwhiteman / OnlyRel
Posted on: 2012-12-16 07:03:18

Close ass battle. Illest I felt your flow ALOT and I liked that beginning bar. But 1) Try to refrain from rhyming the same word twice in this case 'ass'- badASS and halfASS. and 2) When doing multies make sure the rhyme is 3-5 syllables to increase effectiveness. My best solution is up your vocab. Now OnlyRel you had a lot of potential punches that would have been hardhittin in this situation especially with your good exploitation of vocab BUT your structure was so off it detracted from its effectiveness. I didn't really know where you were takin it as far as the flow and you're rhyme scheme cuz I was sort of confused for the first 2 bars. Then I caught up and when you went into the 'sion' rhyme schem (decision circumcision incision physician) that also warranted deduction because you 1) Rhymed the words way to close together and 2) You broke the multies syllabically. Generally I don't vote on flow but your rap depended so much on the flow or rather your lack of flow subtracted from your verse so much I have to give it to Illest. So in summary Illest work on syllabic complexity, concepts, and vocab. Rel work on structure and multie setups. Keep goin hard. Fair's in. Send complaints in 8 Voted: Illestwhiteman / OnlyRel
Posted on: 2012-12-18 16:26:53

fv gb.. illest is a piece of shit just like his mom Voted: Illestwhiteman / OnlyRel
Posted on: 2012-12-18 22:58:48