I'm on some keystyle snipes lately.. trying to find a new style and stuff. So if you have critiques, I'de love to hear them to help elevation, but bare in mind I'm throwing shit at the wall seeing what sticks!! Thanks. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-11-07 10:04:03

Inzane dude you are dope af Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-11-07 10:04:16

Thank you Jay, I appreciate that! Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-11-07 10:09:45

inzane took it that opening stole it right away woulda liked to see you change the rhyme scheme up a bit tho..gb tho keep elevating Voted: Jay-eFF / InZane™
Posted on: 2012-11-07 11:35:10

i tihnk i liked your style a lil better tho in this one IMO just woulda liked to see you switched the rhymes up Voted: Jay-eFF / InZane™
Posted on: 2012-11-07 11:35:52

Thanks man, just messin with some keystyles atm.. trying some new shit. This one's a lot easier to follow though, I might take summit from this. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-11-07 11:37:03

OK heres what im thinking: Jay-eFF--at first i was thinking that your verse was just total garbage. But then i reread it and i realized that it actually had a pretty good flow and your words rhymes together pretty good. BUT you def. didnt go that hard and i think if u work hard u can do alot better. You gotta work on punchlines and insults. Another thing--use higher syllable words. these are called Multies. and u didnt really use good Multies that much i see you had some but most of the time you didnt use any multies. Your verse sounded good when i read it out loud im not saying that your not good im just saying u gotta elevate and work harder. InZane--Every battle u use a different rhmye scheme. i know your just trying out some different styles but u had the same rhyme scheme throughout tha whole battle. It would have been nice to see you change it up a little. anyway, with that aside, you DID have Multies (good ones) and punchelines (pretty decent) and i loved tha first 2 lines they were dope. well thats pretty much it. InZane u took this battle 100% but like i said it woulda been nice to see you use a different ryhme scheme after the 2nd or 3rd line. and Jay-eFF remember to cap your punchlines and include some multibable-syllable rhymes and capitalize them too. And even though u didnt have good punches or multis it had a nice flow to it. you should try doing audio battles cuz like i said it didnt flow good unless i read it out loud. just make sure you take my advice u got tha skillz to elevate you just gotta work hard at it. #trueshit Voted: Jay-eFF / InZane™
Posted on: 2012-11-07 12:12:15

@decimal I appreciate the advice Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-11-07 12:34:10

East vote: InZane Voted: Jay-eFF / InZane™
Posted on: 2012-11-07 15:21:34

http://www.letsbeef. com/battle_details.p hp?id=449163§ion =tb plz vote on my battle Voted: Jay-eFF / InZane™
Posted on: 2012-11-08 12:18:50

I have ma winner tho. Voted: Jay-eFF / InZane™
Posted on: 2012-11-10 10:03:33