Expo: half the box/ he only filled barley half his box, and like pussy off with his head like a big joke/ big pun sings off with his head. a pun is a joke. to become a vet survive the war first/ like vets from wars and picked cha day/picture day. elemtary school? Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-10-23 00:09:02

nothing sold from either side but i think one made more of an attempt at landing harder punches, actually filled the box and has some nice ideas but needs to work on building on them Voted: patricmailau8 / Adubs KiloG
Posted on: 2012-10-23 05:23:31

One had the better schemes as the other was just rhyming imo. Both could use some work but the winner did just enough to get the win here. Voted: patricmailau8 / Adubs KiloG
Posted on: 2012-10-23 07:07:37

This is a pretty easy one for me and a breakdown is not needed but if a tip list is wanted then ask... Voted: patricmailau8 / Adubs KiloG
Posted on: 2012-10-23 14:22:50

patric, you should try filling in the box rather than doing line by line because the space in the box is limited and filling it would give you a chance to maximize your punch count. With that being said, you didn't have any punch that was outstanding and you spent quite a few lines digressing from directly dissing your opponent. Adubs, I felt you had a better use of multies and you threw more direct shots, but try to increase the level of complexity fam. You could have said a lot of the same things you were saying but illustrate the point by making comparisons (metaphors) and that would have given it a lot more flavor. In the end, I felt one came better here. Keep elevating fellas. Voted: patricmailau8 / Adubs KiloG
Posted on: 2012-10-23 15:20:39

winner here slightly better multis and disses, other had a more audio style scheme which was decent but wastes alot of box space which brought the verse down a bit content wise, disses were also basic as well.. fairs in Voted: patricmailau8 / Adubs KiloG
Posted on: 2012-10-24 04:43:59