Lets get some real fair votes foreal that comment was soo irrelevant to the battle NO HATIN iight give fair then you'll get fair back Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-09-06 16:59:24

What u TALKIN bout I murdered you Fuck DMK Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-09-06 19:42:07

boomer-right off to bat bro, your verse was laden wit alot of basic endrhymes.. 2syllable then 1, only towards the end did you get 3 so based on that scheme consistency and complexity was lacking.. another thing you could work on is try to be more strict if your gonna practice wit 2 syllable rhymes.. ex.. steak kept, and sore neck.. to make it a stronger multi, its mandatory that you also match the first word in each set.. so steak kept, wit stay fresh, and sore neck with more reps , etc.. this will help your foundation more fam... what i did like was you tried to go wit some basic concepts like 'couldnt saturate his self if he drunk drl. kelp.. ' this is a good start.. i would ve said 'couldnt saturate his self' rockin SHAM WOW TEES/ or some ish.. you got the idea, now work on stronger similes, per line.. DTAY- your couplets are awkward structure wise, first bar, your droppin a concept in the beginning wit handlebars, but the simile was weak imo.. i wouldve said 'handle bars' faster than SCHWINN ASSEMBLY LINES.. or some ish..next one didnt make sense to me, how does extra edition have anything to do wit having his body sent outta state.. the relation doesnt work imo.. next bar walkin, talkin , poppin. all match well but filler to.. after that is pretty much same , no concepts/punches/ metas, just more multi filler... what i did like was that pretty much all your multis matched well... any way, my winner came wit a more polished rhyme scheme.. punchwise was about even in my eyes.. fairs in.. Voted: Boomer / MeTa-FoRcEz
Posted on: 2012-09-07 03:18:43

Boomer, ur structure, multies, concepts, and punch power all needs alil uuumph to them. Ur flow is iiiiight but better multies wud really help that out even more. Tay ur elevatin tho dawg, but ur multie placement makes ur flow type akward. Ur punches and concept relation is waaaay better than tha late batch of shiiiis i read but u still need to improve there inorder for ur bars to hit harder. Also find a better structure. Overall one was on another level here. No hate, Jus Tha Hoodz Vote. Voted: Boomer / MeTa-FoRcEz
Posted on: 2012-09-07 04:26:09

Extra edition looking for criminalsExtradition sent outta state Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-09-07 22:20:24