Both were pretty weak. But fv no h8 Voted: roxyG / Oversoul
Posted on: 2012-07-30 17:39:51

To Be Honest - Both Suck, Need to Fill The Box. If ya'll wanna know why these verse's such pm me..or send 8 and get shiittted on! Voted: roxyG / Oversoul
Posted on: 2012-07-30 17:41:22

Ya not one of my best freestyles but hey better then most who sit and think about all their shit for hours Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-07-30 19:34:49

vote bak faIR VOTE Voted: roxyG / Oversoul
Posted on: 2012-07-30 21:19:55

oversoul took this one. but still a good battle. much love. vote back Voted: roxyG / Oversoul
Posted on: 2012-07-30 21:40:20

haha.. i fuks w/ that opener tho. Tha Hoodz Vote. Keep it up Fellas. Voted: roxyG / Oversoul
Posted on: 2012-07-30 22:01:28

first time on here, friend put me on Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-07-30 23:47:59

fv Voted: roxyG / Oversoul
Posted on: 2012-07-31 01:07:08

So much respect for Oversoul especially since he freestyled. RESPECT. FV vote back please. much love Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-07-31 02:34:50

FV Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-07-31 02:35:40

ok ROXG- your flow was ok, first bar was really short, and that samurai, ham or die etc.. is alot of irrelevant filler , that doesnt attack your opponent , nor setup anything leading up to a diss... so id stay away from that, your multis were sorta complex at times out, but start by being consistent wit 3 syllable end rhymes than go from there, because the multis were mismatched for the most part, syllable count wise... your use of similes/metaphors are a good idea to implement,like the weight of a strongman etc.. and as you gain experience practice gettin a bit more clever in your analogies.. instead of straight forward metas... like the one i mentioned above.. ex... push more weight than WINDS IN TORNADOS, or SHOES ON PRECIOUS.. etc..etc.. next bar, sit on the comp and listen, didnt make sense because then you say somethin bout the swamp... you need to focus on one idea per bar, so it remains cohesive and not random jibberish thrown in for the sake of rhyming.. my advice is try to work on improving your structure of bars, the first line should setup what your next line which is the main diss should end up being... work on keeping your multis matching properly, not 3 syllable, then 4 etc in the same set.. OVERSOUL; your first line was ok, next line tho was really long, you need to learn to simplify your wording as to get the point across wit less.. it helps wit flow, otherwise it wont sound like a verse anymore, but just long ass statements followed by an endryhme, i also noticed you got some decent usage of internal multi within the bars, ex.fairys flyin, scary lion.. was good effort, first concept which was wonderyears, was different, never heard of that one before, so thats a good thing, but afterwards, stuff got pretty basic like the pornstar can cum wordplay.. i think your biggest asset right now, is you kinda got a good structure foundation, scheme wise.. i would tho cap the multis here because it'll become more easier to see for the untrained eyes, its more of a personal preference, but you should consider it..i think what you need to work on is stronger metaphors, and puns, it will help keep your bars entertaining.. and score strenght points in the dissing area..so in short, work on shortening your bars by simplifyin unnecessary wording, keep each line to about 12 to 14 words, then as you get good you can adjust the line counts for flow... and work on a bit more clever or unpredictable metaphor, puns,, my winner came wit a slightly better scheme and disses, imo.. other had alot of rhyming but lacked in creativity ... both had ups and downs so its a matte of preference...fairs in.. good luck.. Voted: roxyG / Oversoul
Posted on: 2012-07-31 04:07:02

gone wit it Voted: roxyG / Oversoul
Posted on: 2012-07-31 12:21:20

Over soul had that Voted: roxyG / Oversoul
Posted on: 2012-07-31 15:09:04

Yea i agree though they both was weak. But if i had to choose id say over soul Voted: roxyG / Oversoul
Posted on: 2012-07-31 15:12:09

HAHA if ya'll dont know what the wonder years is , go watch some classic old school tv Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-07-31 15:35:27

RoxyG : You rhymed okay but your verse was filled with a bunch of filler no relevant lines to anything vs. your opponent at all maybe you should throw some multi's in there and soup up some punches get right with your set ups because your drop wasn't goood seemed like something someone could freestyle when their joking around Im not gonna judge you on the piece but if you know this is your best you have a long way to go as a textcee and i wouldnt mind working with you just pm me and I can help you on the basics... Oversoul : had a okay start seems like you might have the hang of multi's and normal punches just work on your concepts maybe cap your rhyming words for a easier for the people who vote on your battles and you can also hit me up if you need some help gettin to the basics i feel ya start was normal but ya last bar was just put there to meet the 8 line requirement no effort at all nothing really good about ya drop ... (no disrespect to either of you) fair vote is in . Voted: roxyG / Oversoul
Posted on: 2012-08-02 14:29:59