NOT AS MUCH AS IT'S HURTING YOU* my bad typo Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-07-30 13:15:26

fv Voted: Pistons / Ray BaRz™
Posted on: 2012-07-31 00:59:08

Pistons, u started off very weak, your opener had no punches, concepts or… anything really. U need to start off strong to hold the voters attention. It felt like more of a cypher than a battle verse, and that was the case for your entire verse. U need to add some punctuation too so the voter knows where u finishin one line and startin another, or where ur intending a lil pause etc. honestly, your drop had no punches or multis, but when u do use them, u need to be cappin them to draw voters attention to it and so the impact is harder. Im guessin ur fairly new on here so id recommend reading up on battles from the more experienced people on here, see they how they construct their verses, learn from it and keep improving. You do have elements of your verse that were fairly smooth, so keep at it. Use your imagination a bit more and come at your opponent harder. Practice makes perfect! Voted: Pistons / Ray BaRz™
Posted on: 2012-08-01 08:28:25

Kid, honestly, this was messy. ANOTHER LIGHTWEIGHT; UP HIS PSYCHE WITH; GUNS AND KNIFES THAT; FUCKING WIPE ME; BARKS NEVER BITING; BARS THAT HE DECIDES DRAWLS WITH SEMEN DRIED. In the 1st half of ur verse you capped all the above, yet none of them r linked, none of them rhyme, none of them r even punches? So y were they capped? Only cap the stuff that rhymes. U did the same for the rest of the verse too. Be careful with that. I wasn’t really feelin ur content either. It was very basic, little to no concepts, punches rare and weak. Ive read better from u beforeso I dunno if u just dropped this weak cuz it was a snipe? U shud be takin every battle to show off ur skills, regardless of your opponent and this, being brutally honest, was not good. U need to come cleverer and more aggressive. Watch ur capping. If ur gonna use a scheme make sure u stick to it. Id same u also could do with checking out battles from more experienced members and watch their structuring and word play etc. overall, this wasn’t the best read, had some ok elements but both need to get some more practice in to elevate. Voted: Pistons / Ray BaRz™
Posted on: 2012-08-01 08:28:44

Pistons - I'm only going to give you a couple tips as it seems you are very basic and I dont want to overload you. .. CAP your Rhyming words... Also work on attacking your opponent, The majotity of your bars are about yourself and detroit as the focus. . .That Will Not get you any wins. No one wants to hear about that in a battle, Attack your opponrnt!! KiDD - Bro your multies were WAAAY off (knifes that, wipe me...no way) you the idea of punches and concepts, however they were not executed properly at all. in fact i found the punches to be not that offensive thus doing little damage calling someone a 'ho' cmon son your better than that..... Overall- this was crap battle one needs to really start upping there game, the other needs to go back to the drawing board. FAIRS IN Voted: Pistons / Ray BaRz™
Posted on: 2012-08-01 22:51:39

Kid lyric I think the first 4 bars you wrote sealed the deal,Piston drop was woobly lacked a lot in it,as I read he Tks abot bot NBA shit 2013 detroit game? I don't ge that at all so my vote goes for Kid for Clearence Fairs in Voted: Pistons / Ray BaRz™
Posted on: 2012-08-02 09:28:15