like u kuniiii1 & RAPFORever ya good 2 Voted: kuniiii1 / RAPfORever
Posted on: 2012-07-28 01:02:12

Kuni: Opener line was mehh.. too simplistic, not enough creativity put into it. All flwed well though. The elevation line was cool. The rest of the verse was the same very simplistic. Concepts seem to be way to basic. So def improve on bringing a bit more original concepts and being more complex when connecting these concepts with your set ups. Also fix your structure, it doesn't take anything away from your verse but you started using -'s in between multi's and then randomly stopped. And you don't have to dash between each syllable either, that shit is annoying.. Other than that punchwise, although simplistic and the light factor it had on your opponent it, you showed consistancy to throw a punch with every line. Thats a good sign, keep that up and just come with the better concepts and your verse will show alot of improvement.... RAP: Opening kinda mehh.. Used a one syllable multi scheme and capped words that didn't have anything to do with the multi'... Next bar lacked flow alot. Again capped stuff that has nothing to do with the multi scheme and nothing rhymed with "Through A meet grinda". Concept could have been okay but the wording and rhyming usage you dropped with was way off... Same typa expo through your whole verse. I did like how you attempted to come persoanl at kunnii but the wording and rhyming was out of control here. Def the main thing is taking a step back and restructuring your verse. Start making sure all your rhymes work with each other and verse has a smooth read and flow to it.. Votes in. Stay up! Voted: kuniiii1 / RAPfORever
Posted on: 2012-07-30 16:08:55

FV kuniiii took this one. Vote back yo! Voted: kuniiii1 / RAPfORever
Posted on: 2012-07-30 21:51:50