A-Finish ya bars..work on concepts. Z-work on better multies and concepts, nice finisher!!! Voted: -Z0NE- / A-R
Posted on: 2012-07-27 04:18:46

ZONE : Your opener (range known/stayed home) was somewhat of a drag due to the lack of consistency of complexity... The James Holmes line could have been stronger if your set-up was worded better and also if your next line was worded better then it would have been stronger... so remember your set-ups need to be stronger along with your execution which revolves around the complexity of your wording.. Try making people think a little more on what you say but make sure it makes sense... Also 2 syllable multies aren't to good so try using 4-6 syllable multies cuz it helps out with the flow.... The concept isn't too played yet but its about to be so find topic to spit about that no one else does... Your next 2 bars (smokey the bear/blow me in there) once again lacked complexity... So like i said work on set-ups and execution by wording your bars better and try finding better concepts cuz the concepts you've provided are rather juvenile... The multies were cool but like i said you need to be more complex.... And also the blow me in there shit, yeah dont say shit like that.. Your closer was a little on the weak side... Make sure your syllable count is always the same and remember better concepts, 4-6 syllable multies and better wording will help with set-ups,execution and complexity... Make us think............... ...... A-R you look like this dude i was locked up with in JRC which is in bowling green, I'm from Toledo... Anyways your opener was rather weak cuz you didn't have a set-up to go with it and your just basically trash talking him... Be more creative with what you say cuz punches aren't the only thing that wins battles... And your multies need to be better also, R'll doesn't rhyme with talk or off.. This is text so the words you hear that sound like they rhyme with audio dont always work with text... Also finding good topics/concepts to spit about will always be a plus so try spitting about shit that no one else does but make sure you attack your opponent with it.. Your next 2 bars(stop the talk/shopping carts) the same applies with the multies... The word talk would be the odd word out cuz it doesn't really rhyme unless your lil wayne... The shopping cart line could have been better if there was more to it and there was a better set-up so work on your wording cuz like i been saying creativity helps a lot when it comes to winning a text battle.. Like i told your opponent, make us think but make sure your bars make sense... Make sure your consistently attacking your opponent with well thought out punches..... Your closer was a lot of filler which isn't a good thing at all.. You were just flowing... There was no creativity, no set-ups, no real punches and no good concepts... The frame was cracked line could have been stronger if you worded it better but the concept isn't to good and its played... Make sure you also fill in your box... Overall this battle wasn't to good but it wasn't the worse... Dont bitch about the ratings either cuz I'm one of the fairest voters on here.... Voted: -Z0NE- / A-R
Posted on: 2012-07-27 05:45:37

good stuff no hate Voted: -Z0NE- / A-R
Posted on: 2012-07-27 12:21:56

.....fv Voted: -Z0NE- / A-R
Posted on: 2012-07-28 01:01:14

decent battle here, like onez concepts nd punches here so good stuff Voted: -Z0NE- / A-R
Posted on: 2012-07-28 15:25:57

wow @ da votes here ..... man let me break this down...smh@dez votes Voted: -Z0NE- / A-R
Posted on: 2012-07-28 15:28:22

(((Old School Break down))))---Sending warning shots to make my RANGE KNOWN, like a Twilight movie, leave you in a STRANGE ZONE, you wont make it to the credits, cuz I pull a JAMES HOLMES, shooten up the audience, have you screamin " I should've STAYED HOME!"/----This was decent current with whats goin on....but hella long to get to the point here....actually took the bang from it--))))) if you fakin your heat I will extinguish ya fire like SMOKEY THE BEAR, Bars hit you in the neck and leave ya THROAT PIECE IMPAIRED! even if I was a frisby you couldnt THROW ME IN AIR(((((( k cool build up here... punch..was light bar was ok )))))), ((((both of us in prison I'd make you BLOW ME IN THERE!!I don't even SWEAT the SHOOTERS FEE to have you taken more hits than a LEX LUGER BEAT((((Multis are so like jacked in there messed up the flow, simple ehh punch)))), and I school your ass through my computer like a NET TUTOR, GEE!((( finisher jus merely filler ish )))) ok next to A-R Voted: -Z0NE- / A-R
Posted on: 2012-07-28 15:33:50

come on now, u again, sombody betta TALK TO DUDE/ n warn him dat R'll SHOOT, n just OFF DIS NOOB/ (((( Opener Nothing but... fillertypeish))))so STOP DA TALK, or da GLOCK'll ARCH, n I'LL SPARK/ have u catch da HOTTEST PART, n just fill up like SHOPPIN CARTS/(((These bars went hard , if peeps say this shit out loud nd seen face to face battles....would known.... but good ish)) n its a STATED FACT, dat ya OUT DATED RAPS, are just LAME N WACK/ u AIN'T A MAC, u just a LAME DAT LACK simple concepts like BASIC MATH/((( Like the Swagg text flow here.build was nice punch hittin on mid side here ))) so TAKE YA RAPS before I BLAZE DA MAC n make ya LEGS COLLAPSE/ n leave u pictured half a man, like da FRAME WAS CRACKED(((( ok Finsher was ok , hit on mid to low here but deff a good concepts nd builds up here !!! BangBang Voted: -Z0NE- / A-R
Posted on: 2012-07-28 15:38:26

Fairs in, Fuels out. Voted: -Z0NE- / A-R
Posted on: 2012-07-28 17:27:24

fv Voted: -Z0NE- / A-R
Posted on: 2012-07-29 08:45:21

complex from one, candy bars from the other...decent battle but AN EASY CHOICE...respect to both always Voted: -Z0NE- / A-R
Posted on: 2012-07-30 01:40:57