good battle homie. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-03-25 22:30:49

1 had a strange structure w/a few ideas that were a little too long winded for me. The other has the name play. Wording to Make them hit could have been tighter, only minor things but fixed would have made a world of difference. Either way I have my winner. Voted: Red Dot / Phracture
Posted on: 2012-03-25 22:36:02

-Both Threw that Punches in Bunches. Red Made Me Laugh a Few times. He Had a Few Nice Name Slays but the Challenger Had a Tad Bit Harder Approach with a Lil More Intensity. again i say this Was Close. Now Onto Other Business, Almighty You Can Respond to His Personal But Not Mine? yea You're the Man. *Fake Cheers* Voted: Red Dot / Phracture
Posted on: 2012-03-25 22:59:13

this Red Dot guy is ILL. GB tho. VOTE BACK Voted: Red Dot / Phracture
Posted on: 2012-03-25 23:21:28

this was a blind drop battle btw Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-03-25 23:24:03

Both was good wit the punches but one had a bit more punch power Voted: Red Dot / Phracture
Posted on: 2012-03-26 00:08:14

I just felt one came better than his opponent, no hate to either.. Fair's tossed.. Vote back.. Voted: Red Dot / Phracture
Posted on: 2012-03-26 00:44:49

one had ideaz but they were to stretched. the other had much better follow through to the punch. FV is in. Voted: Red Dot / Phracture
Posted on: 2012-03-26 03:07:47

GB Voted: Red Dot / Phracture
Posted on: 2012-03-26 05:07:23

Fair Voted: Red Dot / Phracture
Posted on: 2012-03-26 08:15:53

RED DOT: Overall, I'd say the problem with your verse was the flow and the beats between punches. Your opener was a nice concept, but with all those filler multis between the start and the punch made it a little more underwhelming (also, the 'like what' to set up the punch acted like a little speed bump, which jittered the flow) - If you're going to do an opener in an eight, I'd say one scheme, two schemes MINIMUM, before the hint and the punch, otherwise it's a space-waster. The next punch, same again. There was too much filla, some of it really quite irrelevant: Raised up on food stamps? That sounds all too cypher-ish for me and dude, c'mon, it's basically giving them a flip opportunity. The hint/punch line, with the "Al" concept, was not flowing whatsoever. You constructed a sentence that was rickety, the words didn't flow into one another quite so good. The punch was alright... As for the closer, the flow got a bit better. I noticed that you've stayed on a gunplay grind for the whole verse: First punch, Shooting Him. Second punch, Saying he doesn't have a gun. Start of closer: Blast with the pump, concluding with his death. The concluding with his death part is fine, but you should really mix up what you're targeting. Gunplay all through is a bit unoriginal and repetitive. Be sure to mention other specs, like his rap game, comic remarks about appearance? Be more creative bro. The closer's punch was alright, if not a little predictable and played, but it worked for me. OK, considering the inconsistent flow and the amount of filla that took away from the punchlines, I'm giving you a high (?). Almighty: You had a similar problem with the filla at the beginning, but it improved as you went along. The stamp punch was good and well set-up. The build-up in the schemes helped, if you made it a bit more compact and 'straight off the pan', it would have been harder. I love how the stamp punch turns out to be a jab, and then you come out with a quick-hit punch afterwards, which was set-up in the bar beforehand. Very creative with that. The jabs leading up to the closer were alright. Dude a dead flounder: I didn't like that very much, although it ties in with sleeping with the fishes, it felt a bit too forced for me and it also diverts away from the fishes phrase, you turned him into a dead fish, haha. Next line was a relevant set-up. Closer was nicely done and well worded. I think a comma after the 3 W's would have helped, just for a tiny clarification on the concept working both ways. For the consistent concepts and creative structure, I'm giving you a solid (?). Sorry for the essay, I was in the mood for a big critique. Always fair. Vitty's votey. Voted: Red Dot / Phracture
Posted on: 2012-03-26 13:37:02

One took it to me imo. Almighty no h8 bro but u need to practice dawg. Voted: Red Dot / Phracture
Posted on: 2012-03-26 15:47:20

good battle Voted: Red Dot / Phracture
Posted on: 2012-03-27 15:33:06

Both openers were pretty solid, but the syllables in ones second multi scheme were a bit rough and that reduced the quality of the punches impact. Despite the rought start, the highlight of the drop was the Home Improvement concept, which was actually really solid, but the punch couldve been worded & executed a bit better to hit harder & the finisher could've been set-up much better to compliment the punchline. The other verse however was consistent throughout the drop w/ a smoother structure, more creative jabs, and some pretty solid word & nameplay to setup the punches. That being said, I feel the winner had better punch execution with fresher concepts and nicer wordplay to take this one. FVs tossed Voted: Red Dot / Phracture
Posted on: 2012-03-28 12:06:04

nice Voted: Red Dot / Phracture
Posted on: 2012-03-28 17:53:43