expos: "Girl on ya side? Ill KICK HER IN TWO with no LIQOUR IN VIEW" - sidekick is an alcoholic drink. "Lol pussy lines, like HALLE FAXED EM THRU! (Halifax) " halifax is where he's from, pussy lines - catwoman - halle berry film Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-03-21 19:17:59

fv Voted: 4Jokez / Rebz
Posted on: 2012-03-21 19:35:51

~BragginG Writez~ Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-03-21 19:44:44

SHOWOFF Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-03-21 21:00:49

Why the fuck did it put Advanced Ratings down? LOL Oh well, gb man. helped me shake my cobwebs off. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-03-21 21:57:13

One was pretty good but he needs to work on his setups and punchlines. The other was more consistent and had some nice multies and flow...no h8. FAIR ONE DROPPED! Voted: 4Jokez / Rebz
Posted on: 2012-03-22 17:42:41

This came down to who was bolder and clearer in their verse. 4Jokez, you made references and hints, but you didn't follow through with the punchlines. Your grip on concepts is evident, but they were all extremely vague in terms of their use: For example, rob-his-hood (robin hood), not mention, this is a terribly forced wordplay and even so, the punch you intended didn't come through due to the lack of a double entendre plus subtlety. I get the Friar Tuck reference, but it was all too weak for me: You continued to make hints after that, the Sheriff and Warbands refs. but there was really no point to the entire bar. Overall, I see you starting to use concepts, but you need to study up on how to convert them into punchlines (check out double entendres and innuendos, that should help) ... Rebz, your verse was decent. I liked the comic opener, but the line itself could have used more bulk, perhaps a concept hint? The punchline itself was good, with a nice creative use of imagery, but I felt like you could have complexified it a little to make it more interesting and bold. Sidekick ref. was okay, but the punch after that (Sicker Than U) was mad played and over-used. Try to avoid that concept in the future, it's quite noobish this days. I like the scheme so far, but the multies seemed to fall apart after that punch. Your closer, Halifax wordplay... I understand the reference, again, but you need to make the concept CLEAR so it makes sense straight away: What you need to do is start clarifying your lines through the use of "concept hints" so people can feel your punch easier, without having to take a sec to decipher it. Overall, a decent verse, but it still shows signs of bad habits. The winner here was more consistent and remained slightly better in all areas throughout. Always fair. Vitty's votey. Voted: 4Jokez / Rebz
Posted on: 2012-03-22 17:50:06

votes in.. hit me up if you want a better expo but overall one was stronger Voted: 4Jokez / Rebz
Posted on: 2012-03-22 19:25:30

sorry about the 3.. real talk i meant to hit the 4. Voted: 4Jokez / Rebz
Posted on: 2012-03-22 19:26:14

this was kinda 1 sided imo , although the winer need to work on more complex concepts and the loser needs to work on structure and multis fair vote as always Voted: 4Jokez / Rebz
Posted on: 2012-03-22 20:17:47

Thanks for all the feedback, definitely gonna work on this shit. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-03-22 22:25:23

Fuckin' ShowOff.. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-03-24 17:32:21

-Good Shit #SHOWOFF!! Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-03-24 19:59:33